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Post by Heather » Thu Oct 03, 2013 6:14 pm

Trying something new here. Would welcome comments - if you don't like it that's ok too. What does it make you think? How does it make you feel?


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Re: Minted Waters

Post by Stephen Whiteside » Thu Oct 03, 2013 7:37 pm

Reminds me of Yeats. Nice. I think from memory Henry Lawson did it too.
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Re: Minted Waters

Post by Heather » Thu Oct 03, 2013 7:46 pm

Funny you should say that Stephen because I was reading a bit of Yeats poetry today- but I didn't base this poem on anything he wrote.

Did "it"?
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Re: Minted Waters

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Thu Oct 03, 2013 8:21 pm

I like it - but it feels unfinished
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Re: Minted Waters

Post by Stephen Whiteside » Thu Oct 03, 2013 8:28 pm

Yes, I thought you might pick me up on that. I guess just the theme of a child drowning in a pool. For Yeats it was "The Lost Child", and for Lawson it was "The Water Lily". I think.
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Re: Minted Waters

Post by Stephen Whiteside » Thu Oct 03, 2013 8:29 pm

Sorry. Yeats was "The Stolen Child". I first heard it as a song. Very haunting. Can't remember who it was, but it might come to me.
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Re: Minted Waters

Post by Stephen Whiteside » Thu Oct 03, 2013 8:30 pm

OK. Now I've got it. It was "The Waterboys". Check it out if you get a chance - absolutely fantastic.
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Re: Minted Waters

Post by Stephen Whiteside » Thu Oct 03, 2013 8:31 pm

I always assumed "The Water Lily" was a re-working of "The Stolen Child".
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Re: Minted Waters

Post by Heather » Thu Oct 03, 2013 8:38 pm

Will check it out Stephen.

Maureen I have deliberately left the story for you to make something of it... :) It is an experiment and I wanted to try a different rhyming scheme to anything else I've ever tried. It is not meant to tell you the whole story - although it describes something that happened to me.....the mystery deepens :lol:
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Re: Minted Waters

Post by Robyn » Fri Oct 04, 2013 6:57 am

I like it Heather... I think it is one that stays with you after you move on to the next page.
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