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There you are Phil. That is a bit easier to see.
I like the poem. It has a lot going for it I reckon. You say it is not correct technically, well the more I try to learn about poetry, the more I find that I am not sure what technically correct might mean.
To the horror of those on this site I would believe that your poem would be much better without the constant end rhymes. Just my opinion.
I think stanzas 2,4,6, and 7 are particularly good and would be better if you were not straining some of the language to gain a rhyme.
Also a couple of picky bits. the horses drinking container is one of those odd words spelled trough but pronounced troff.
In stanza 7. " old men did play games " please I beg you make it " old men played games "
And I know Newington Inn, but I was never a college boy
. The problem in that area is the dreadful traffic pollution that is Stanmore Road. Doesn't the memory of that ease your homesickness.
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- Ladies and Gentleman I suspect we are in the company of greatness - all I can say is bloody hell