homework we 6/06/16 - The Cruise.
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- Wendy Seddon
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homework we 6/06/16 - The Cruise.
The Cruise
My friend has hit the big six-o
and thought it would be cool
to take a cruise across the globe
and ask her friends from school.
Now cruising’s not my favourite thing,
can think of nothing worse!
But, she’s a mate – I’ll make the leap
and stifle every curse.
She said there’s entertainment
and fine dining that’s the best,
But how can I go dancing when
I’m stuffed in safety vest?
Ships are on the water where
they rock and roll and pitch!
“Wen, you will get used to it.”
she said, she’s such a mate.
I argue it’s not needed
we can celebrate ashore!
But still she sent my ticket
and would hear of nothing more.
			
									
									My friend has hit the big six-o
and thought it would be cool
to take a cruise across the globe
and ask her friends from school.
Now cruising’s not my favourite thing,
can think of nothing worse!
But, she’s a mate – I’ll make the leap
and stifle every curse.
She said there’s entertainment
and fine dining that’s the best,
But how can I go dancing when
I’m stuffed in safety vest?
Ships are on the water where
they rock and roll and pitch!
“Wen, you will get used to it.”
she said, she’s such a mate.
I argue it’s not needed
we can celebrate ashore!
But still she sent my ticket
and would hear of nothing more.
Wen de Rhymewriter      There is nothing mundane about the ordinary.
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Re: homework we 6/06/16 - The Cruise.
Hi Wendy
Someone we know went on a cruise and described it as "taking a holiday in a shopping mall". (I like your 'rhyme' for "pitch"!)
Cheers
David
			
									
									
						Someone we know went on a cruise and described it as "taking a holiday in a shopping mall". (I like your 'rhyme' for "pitch"!)
Cheers
David
- Wendy Seddon
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Re: homework we 6/06/16 - The Cruise.
Well David, a holiday in a shopping mall sounds good to me - maybe I will enjoy it after all!
			
									
									Wen de Rhymewriter      There is nothing mundane about the ordinary.
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Re: homework we 6/06/16 - The Cruise.
Good go at the homework Wendy.   
  
 
  
			
									
									 
  It's well known that Wendy is a lady of suitable decorum.David Campbell wrote:(I like your 'rhyme' for "pitch"!)
 
  
Neville
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Re: homework we 6/06/16 - The Cruise.
Definitely felt the rocking and rolling as I read this, Wendy - nearly had to go and take a seasickness pill!   
 
Very good!
Cheers
Shelley
			
									
									 
 Very good!
Cheers
Shelley
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Re: homework we 6/06/16 - The Cruise.
Mate v Pitch threw me as well  but eventually I got it.  Such refinement
  but eventually I got it.  Such refinement  
   is nice to see.  Great use of the prompts Wen.
  is nice to see.  Great use of the prompts Wen.
			
									
									 but eventually I got it.  Such refinement
  but eventually I got it.  Such refinement  
   is nice to see.  Great use of the prompts Wen.
  is nice to see.  Great use of the prompts Wen.Check out The Scribbly Bark Poets blog site  here -
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