Homework week ended 7th April - Turning wheels

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Maureen K Clifford
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Re: Homework week ended 7th April - Turning wheels

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Fri Apr 04, 2014 2:49 pm

Great use of the prompts Marty - well done and I like your take on it - Typo in the 2nd last verse - They must reach their destination.

This verse sent shivers up my spine as it pretty well depicted the last driver who drove the last coach on the Yuleba-Surat run, his image popped straight into my head as I read your words.
An ancient bloke is driving whitened hair blows in the breeze
he keeps a keen eye open as he steers them past the trees
aboard a group of strangers have embarked along the way
they say they are the souls he takes to meet their judgement day
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Re: Homework week ended 7th April - Turning wheels

Post by Glenny Palmer » Fri Apr 04, 2014 11:14 pm

I like this Marty. I was wishing it was longer I was so involved. Ta for sharing. :D
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Re: Homework week ended 7th April - Turning wheels

Post by Bob Pacey » Sat Apr 05, 2014 5:04 am

You go ok Marty

Good one mate

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