Bet this one goes down well at the pub Marty, great when you can write the story in a poem and all the listeners are in on the story.
Good one mate.
Bob
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The purpose in life is to have fun.
After you grasp that everything else seems insignificant !!!
After you grasp that everything else seems insignificant !!!
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yeah i know what you mean I'm working on one for a big tough bloke who's sister says he is scared of frogs.
This is a bloke who will not hesitate to grab a brown snake and whip crack it but chuck a green frog at him and he freaks.
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This is a bloke who will not hesitate to grab a brown snake and whip crack it but chuck a green frog at him and he freaks.
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That looks pretty good Marty. It would be easier to read if you worked on the punctuation a bit
I don't think that punctuation should be a hoop for writers to jump through it's an aid to the reader to receive the message better.

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That looks better I think .
I don't think there are rules for commas, I reckon they just go with the feel of the rhythm, so I guess some people have different ideas of where commas should go. You reminded me of thoughts about inverted commas for speech, I'll put that question in the discussion page.

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