Winning poem
Winning poem
Because my poem is free verse I didn't want to upset anyone by posting with the bush poems, so here it is..... this normally is "centred" on the page but I can't do it here.
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This Gum’s age he could not contemplate,
zephyrs swirl through leaves,
flickers sunlight like an old film projector.
Memories stir
she’s beside him
soul mate, his love, his rock.
Adoring eyes meet as they always have.
Returning to their cottage
peeling paint
fly screen door — gauze torn — rotting.
Walking, slowly along dusty floor
past the disused stove
Glimpses, her apron over the oven door handle
Notices, cobwebs
His meals now brought on wheels.
Tired, he’s on their bed
once filled with devoted love
he drifts….
Again she stands beside him
though, now more than a vision.
Takes her hand
beneath flickering sunlight.
David J Delaney ©
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This Gum’s age he could not contemplate,
zephyrs swirl through leaves,
flickers sunlight like an old film projector.
Memories stir
she’s beside him
soul mate, his love, his rock.
Adoring eyes meet as they always have.
Returning to their cottage
peeling paint
fly screen door — gauze torn — rotting.
Walking, slowly along dusty floor
past the disused stove
Glimpses, her apron over the oven door handle
Notices, cobwebs
His meals now brought on wheels.
Tired, he’s on their bed
once filled with devoted love
he drifts….
Again she stands beside him
though, now more than a vision.
Takes her hand
beneath flickering sunlight.
David J Delaney ©
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Re: Winning poem
Love it Dave - WELL DONE - I especially like this line its very atmospheric and descriptive
Cheers
Maureen
Brilliantflickers sunlight like an old film projector.
Cheers
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Re: Winning poem
Congratulations on a win.
Neville
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Re: Winning poem
Just to show my ignorance to the world.....I reckon ''sunlight flickers; an old film projector''..........Take notice of me David & you mighta come second!!
Well done indeed mate.
Cheeers
Glenny
Well done indeed mate.
Cheeers
Glenny
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Re: Winning poem
I would like to add that this quote our fearless leader used pretty well sums up most poetry, there is a lot of "so called" poetry out there (which ever form) that "tells" & not "show".
Thank you Manfred...."If a picture paints a thousand words, then that's art ... but if a few words can paint a thousand pictures - that's POETRY"
Thank you Manfred...."If a picture paints a thousand words, then that's art ... but if a few words can paint a thousand pictures - that's POETRY"
Re: Winning poem
Thanks David, and congratulations. That quote is actually Graham Fredriksen's ...