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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2016 2:30 pm
by mummsie
In response to Bob's request. This poem was born from a homework project back in October and one I'm working on as.a future performance piece...I have never been good at punctuation but with David Campbells generous guidance it now has a very different feel...


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(c)]Sue Pearce 2015

“The Orchid Man, it couldn’t be!" the words, profound with grief,
conveyed throughout a neighborhood left stunned with disbelief.
Those sentiments still echo loud though months have gone astray,
and closure, brother, has been hard-that's what I seek today...


The dual highway snakes its way through pastures lush and green,
the open spaces buying time where thoughts at last can glean
the kinship only twins can share, the milestones since our birth,
a friendship born and measured by the pedestal of worth.

Nostalgia fills the moment the old mailbox springs to view,
the landmark now an empty shell, its hinges hang askew,
reflecting...I recall the written letters from the past
that we retrieved as children, precious memories unsurpassed.

I navigate the rutted drive that leads toward the farm;
the lane, though barely visible, instills a knowing calm,
as if inviting passers-by to “stop off” for a while 
and reminisce of days long gone — the thought provokes a smile.

Old times begin to surface as the pepper tree draws near,
an intermingled pathos teeters thoughts, though, crystal clear,
recalling of a girl and boy exploring branches high,
and where aloft, with arms outstretched, sought rainbows in the sky.

The childhood trance is interupted-quickly cast aside...
when remnants of a wooden cross we placed the day “Patch” died
rekindles all the many joys, the giggles as we led
our priceless master “secretly” to warm our winter’s bed.

Commanded by the latter thought I turn and search in vain
the sleep-out, as I wrench aside a brier’s thorny cane,
a victim of the parched surrounds, its flowers bronzed and dead,
entwined around a wooden frame that beckons me ahead.

A shaft of sunlight strays beneath the rusted iron above,
and radiates upon a room where humbleness and love 
accompanied the modest meals that followed daily chores,
like “rhubarb pie with ginger crust”, a favorite of yours.

Impulsively, I find myself excited as a child,
extracting real from fantasy through images I’d filed,
remembering the way things were — the size, the shape, the height,
the “room” beyond rekindling a childhood lost from sight.

With hesitance I turn to leave, reluctant to let go,
when there beside the pepper tree, and how I’ll never know,
an orchid, wild, in flower, rare and beautiful to see,
a message bringing closure from a spirit flying free.

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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2016 4:08 pm
by r.magnay
Very nice Sue

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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2016 10:32 pm
by Terry
Hi Sue

Very nice indeed and really well written.

I've also struggled with punctuation, I think I've improved a bit in recent times, but will never get to be anywhere near perfect.
You have certainly made a good choice in asking David for advise.

Are you still running the caravan park?

I will be over that way hopefully in Sept/Oct to catch up with my daughter and grandchildren in Canberra so may spend a couple of days down your way.

Cheers

Terry

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Posted: Sat Apr 09, 2016 7:55 am
by mummsie
Thank you Ross & Terry

Terry-I guess we're never too old to learn but as David pointed out, if your writing for yourself it's not such an issue but if your writing to share with others it's important so as to have the poem read as we intend it to be.
We retired from the caravan park last July Terry-and enjoying every minute of it.

Cheers
Sue

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Posted: Sat Apr 09, 2016 2:36 pm
by Heather
You had me from the moment I spied the mail box, Sue. My, haven't you come a long way? This is lovely.

Heather :)

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Posted: Sat Apr 09, 2016 5:55 pm
by mummsie
Thank you Matt-I haven't written much of late but with winter bearing down I have big plans. Retirement allows for a few frivolities-po'ing is one.

Thank you Heather. it was lovely to catch up at Corryong however brief it was. I hope you and that boot are seeing eye to eye! ;)

Cheers
Sue

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Posted: Sat Apr 09, 2016 6:21 pm
by Heather
Much too brief Sue - next time. Retirement certainly agrees with you. Boot and I are inseparable -except for sleeping. I ain't sharing my bed with a boot I've only known for four days - even with a row of pillows down the middle of the bed! :)

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Posted: Sat Apr 09, 2016 7:09 pm
by mummsie
Totally agree Heather- you wouldnt want to be seen mooning with a boot now, would you. ;)

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Posted: Sat Apr 09, 2016 7:21 pm
by Heather
No Sue, that would be unseemly (and maybe just a little bit weird), :)

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Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2016 12:20 pm
by Maureen K Clifford
Well done Sue you are on a roll - I remember this one from homework - liked it then, and like it now