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Re: Forgivnes
Posted: Mon Aug 12, 2013 10:09 am
by Heather
"Hatred is like drinking poison and hoping the other person will die". Buddah
Some things you just gotta let go Marty. Peace of mind is the result.
Heather

Re: Forgivnes
Posted: Mon Aug 12, 2013 10:50 am
by william williams
To understand and forgive,
Give's one the peace of mind.
Good luck Marty ands best wishes mate.
Bill the old battler
Re: Forgivnes
Posted: Mon Aug 12, 2013 11:53 am
by Maureen K Clifford
I think it's called mellowing and it always takes two to have an argument - took me a long time too Mate - but every day you get better and stronger.
Re: Forgiveness
Posted: Mon Aug 12, 2013 12:35 pm
by Heather
Not everyone gets wiser as they get older Marty. Sometimes it's the past you have to let go, sometimes it is people. It takes a deep understanding of yourself to do that - you have to know who you are, know that you are worthy, love those that know you for who you are and disregard the rest.
I think Buddha would approve.

Re: Forgivnes
Posted: Mon Aug 12, 2013 5:01 pm
by Neville Briggs
You've set yourself a big task to write on that theme.
And I hope things work out, public confession is a major step.
Just on the poetic side, just my opinion, I think that the sonnet form or the five stresses to a line ( pentameter ) is a better way to deal with that sort of subject.
Yours has a sort of four + three stresses per line, more like the ballad style which might prove to be a bit " bouncy'' for a solemn subject like ; forgiveness and reconciliation over longstanding issues.
The five stresses line (iambic or trochaic pentameter) tends to slow the pace, make a more reflective mood. Look at Shakespeare's plays and you can see what I mean.
" The quality of mercy is not strained
It droppeth as the gentle rain from heaven "
etc.....
Just some thoughts on style. take em or leave em. Meant for encouragement, I comment because I thought that the task you have set yourself here is worth doing.
But I could be wrong.

Re: Forgivnes
Posted: Tue Aug 13, 2013 9:56 am
by Neville Briggs
Righto.

Re: Forgivnes
Posted: Tue Aug 13, 2013 1:14 pm
by Robyn
Well done Marty. I hope the load stays lifted.
All the best.