FULL OF TEARS ... A petrarchan Sonnet

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Maureen K Clifford
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FULL OF TEARS ... A petrarchan Sonnet

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Tue Oct 05, 2021 9:52 am

Always up for a challenge as Shelley knows :lol: so here is my Petrarchan sonnet. Not sure if I have grasped the concept completely but any suggestions and/or criticisms are welcome.



FULL OF TEARS ... Maureen Clifford © The #ScribblyBarkPoet
A Petrarchan Sonnet

Today I rose wearily from my bed
the sun shone brightly in the bluest sky
seen for a while - I had let life pass by
as melancholy overtook my head.
My mind had wandered back when I was wed
so long ago, another lifetime when
I still believed in happiness back then -
it had not from my body drained and bled.

Yes I know that happiness is fleeting
that love and trust do not walk hand in hand.
Dreams don't always come with explanations
and life and time gives us all a beating,
sometimes reality is not so grand.
Love cannot prevent recriminations

5.10.21
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Re: FULL OF TEARS ... A petrarchan Sonnet

Post by Ron » Thu Oct 07, 2021 5:11 pm

I think you've handled that challenge very well Maureen, I liked it!

Ron

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Re: FULL OF TEARS ... A petrarchan Sonnet

Post by Terry » Fri Oct 08, 2021 11:42 am

I don't think I'll bother challenging you to anything Maureen.
You have certainly responded to this one with flying colours.

Love is often full of disappointment - they say.
Certainly makes a good subject for Sonnets.

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Re: FULL OF TEARS ... A petrarchan Sonnet

Post by Shelley Hansen » Wed Oct 13, 2021 3:43 pm

Hi Maureen

Well done, you! Challenge posed, accepted and achieved!!

Because you did ask for feedback, just one thing ... in the sestet you have disturbed your consistency a little by introducing 4 feminine rhymes in among the masculine ones that dominate the remainder of the sonnet. These days rules are less strict with this kind of thing, as you know - but probably to be strictly correct the end line rhyme should remain masculine throughout, as that is the pattern you have established at the beginning.

But well done! The Petrarchan is not an easy structure to master.

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Post by Maureen K Clifford » Tue Oct 19, 2021 10:49 am

Thanks everyone and thanks Shelley for the tip as well - I will bear that in mind and endeavour to improve. :D
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Re: FULL OF TEARS ... A petrarchan Sonnet

Post by Catherine Lee » Wed Nov 03, 2021 4:57 pm

Very poignant, Maureen - and I agree with everyone else here. Terry is right in that this is a good subject for sonnets, Shelley has given you excellent feedback on the rhyme pattern, and as Ron said, this is a challenge well met!

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Re: FULL OF TEARS ... A petrarchan Sonnet

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Fri Nov 05, 2021 9:44 am

Thank you Catherine :D
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