A PANTOUM ..........GOLDEN DAYS

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Maureen K Clifford
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A PANTOUM ..........GOLDEN DAYS

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Tue Oct 19, 2021 10:52 am

A PANTOUM ..........GOLDEN DAYS .. © Maureen Clifford


The warmth of summer sunlight filters through the trees,
and daffodils shyly emerge to gaily herald spring.
A nest of magpie chicks above enjoy a gentle breeze.
The Mother magpie flutters, eating insects on the wing.


And daffodils shyly emerge to gaily herald spring,
their golden petals reaching out to light.
The Mother magpie flutters, eating insects on the wing.
A fully laden honey bee passes by in flight


Their golden petals reaching out to light
they feel the gentle touch of bees embrace.
A fully laden honey bee passes by in flight,
gathering pollen from the blossoms peachy face.


They feel the gentle touch of bees embrace.
Their golden nectar safe enclosed in fragile pollen sacs.
Gathering pollen from the blossoms peachy face
they prepare to fly the long hot journey back.


Their golden nectar safe enclosed in fragile pollen sacs.
Above a nest of magpie chicks enjoy a gentle breeze.
Nature works in perfect harmony, for her no looking back.
The warmth of summer sunlight filters through the trees.
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Re: A PANTOUM ..........GOLDEN DAYS

Post by Shelley Hansen » Tue Oct 19, 2021 11:40 am

This is so lovely, Maureen.

I really think the Pantoum structure and style lends itself to "pastoral" type poems and descriptions of the natural world.

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Re: A PANTOUM ..........GOLDEN DAYS

Post by Ron » Wed Oct 20, 2021 2:52 pm

Yes that is beautiful Maureen, some great lines there! I really enjoyed it.
And once again very clever with the pantoum line structure.

Cheers
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Post by Maureen K Clifford » Fri Nov 05, 2021 9:48 am

Thank you Ron and Shelley :D They are indeed a challenge but an interesting one
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Re: A PANTOUM ..........GOLDEN DAYS

Post by Catherine Lee » Thu Nov 11, 2021 6:18 pm

Ah yes, some truly lovely images here that are instantly clearly seen when reading - challenge well met, Maureen!

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