The Hang Over
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The Hang Over
The Hang Over
I was witless and wasted
My mouth kind of tasted
Like charcoal and fur balls and gravel and stuff
My eyes were still bleeding
Sandpaper reading
I was pleading to die, I wasn’t quite dead enough
I must have got hammered
From what I remembered
Whiskey and scotch became vodka and rum
I lay in a cold sweat
A corpse in a casket
A sad basket case if there ever was one
The mere thought of moving
Was painfully proving
To be more than my body and mind could endure
But then came the hour
I’d set the alarm for
The shriek of the bells made me fall to the floor
I dragged my poor carcass
Across broken glasses
Across empty bottles and cigarette butts
I hauled myself upright
And turned on the faucet
And tried to drown slowly by drinking the drops
So I’m in the shower
Been here for an hour
Letting cold water wash over my head
If this is survival
Thank God I’m alive
But I guess this must be what its like to be dead
Copyright (c) Allan Cropper October 2008
I was witless and wasted
My mouth kind of tasted
Like charcoal and fur balls and gravel and stuff
My eyes were still bleeding
Sandpaper reading
I was pleading to die, I wasn’t quite dead enough
I must have got hammered
From what I remembered
Whiskey and scotch became vodka and rum
I lay in a cold sweat
A corpse in a casket
A sad basket case if there ever was one
The mere thought of moving
Was painfully proving
To be more than my body and mind could endure
But then came the hour
I’d set the alarm for
The shriek of the bells made me fall to the floor
I dragged my poor carcass
Across broken glasses
Across empty bottles and cigarette butts
I hauled myself upright
And turned on the faucet
And tried to drown slowly by drinking the drops
So I’m in the shower
Been here for an hour
Letting cold water wash over my head
If this is survival
Thank God I’m alive
But I guess this must be what its like to be dead
Copyright (c) Allan Cropper October 2008
- Bob Pacey
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Re: The Hang Over
oh no not a drinker ! never been there and never will be.
Bob
Bob
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After you grasp that everything else seems insignificant !!!
After you grasp that everything else seems insignificant !!!
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Re: The Hang Over
A distant memory, Bob.
Don't touch the stuff either
Allan
Don't touch the stuff either
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Re: The Hang Over
I see you made it to our pages Allan
Welcome to the forum. You're off to a good start mate - I enjoyed the read
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Re: The Hang Over
Thanks Maureen. Off an running, and finding inspiration from reading the works of other more experienced poets.
Glad you enjoyed it.
Allan
Glad you enjoyed it.
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Re: The Hang Over
Must have been some party. Wish I'd been there.
A humorous read Allan.
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A humorous read Allan.
Wazza
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Re: The Hang Over
Good poem Allan, with great description - really puts you off the alcohol! ![Very Happy :D](./images/smilies/icon_e_biggrin.gif)
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Re: The Hang Over
Thanks Catherine
Don't drink (no more). Learned my lesson a long time ago.
But it was a fun lyric to wright.
Cheers
Allan
Don't drink (no more). Learned my lesson a long time ago.
But it was a fun lyric to wright.
Cheers
Allan