The Next Day of my Life

In the interests in broadening our horizons, this section is devoted to verse which falls outside the parameters of rhyme and metre, such as blank verse and free verse. Registered users are welcome to post their original works here.
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The Next Day of my Life

Post by Bob Pacey » Wed May 04, 2016 8:55 pm

We have all had a go at times Terry. not sure if I have posted this before could not find it.


THE NEXT DAY OF MY LIFE


Morning ,and nights sweet afterglow
heralds the coming dawn,
light wisps of fog hang softly
in the heavy sullen air.

The stars seem so much clearer now
as their bright orbs adorn the sky
almost if placed by some
tragic artists hand.

Slowly the night fades away
daylight repels the dark.
The first sweet sounds appear
as life makes its presence felt.

Oh to hold this one moment in time
when all things seem at peace,
cherish and caress that sweet joy
close to one's heart and soul.

The dawn breaks and the moment is lost
gone into that bottomless pit of time.
The noise of living pervades the air
and so quickly it is gone.

Fear not for as sure as time itself
tomorrow will bring it's own sweet joy
when once again I see the dawning
of the next day of my life.

Bob Pacey. (c)
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Re: The Next Day of my Life

Post by Heather » Wed May 04, 2016 9:39 pm

Another secret non-rhymer is outed! You really are a surprise sometimes, Bob. I kinda like this.

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Re: The Next Day of my Life

Post by Neville Briggs » Wed May 04, 2016 9:54 pm

Bob, that's what I would read as blank verse couplets in slightly variable metre. A bit different from free verse but extant in published contemporary verse that I read.
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Re: The Next Day of my Life

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Thu May 05, 2016 12:40 pm

That's good Bob - I like it.
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Re: The Next Day of my Life

Post by mummsie » Thu May 05, 2016 4:37 pm

I like this Bob-very much.
Reading the poetry here on the forum gives us some insight into the author I believe-this shows me you have a much softer side Bob :)

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Re: The Next Day of my Life

Post by Terry » Thu May 05, 2016 5:09 pm

G/day Bob

It seems pretty good to me as well.
You have managed to get the feeling into your poem without an over use of words.

But what would I know Mate.

Terry

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Re: The Next Day of my Life

Post by Heather » Thu May 05, 2016 5:20 pm

You know what you like Terry - and that's what counts. :)

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Re: The Next Day of my Life

Post by Bob Pacey » Thu May 05, 2016 5:35 pm

SSSSSSSh Sue don't let that get out I have a reputation to uphold ya know.

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Re: The Next Day of my Life

Post by mummsie » Thu May 05, 2016 5:37 pm

;) your secret's safe with me Bob.
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Re: The Next Day of my Life

Post by Catherine Lee » Sun May 08, 2016 2:41 am

Some beautiful imagery and choice of words here Bob - it's lovely and you have really 'taken me there'. I think we've all felt like this at such times, and in this respect these lines are so true:

'The dawn breaks and the moment is lost
gone into that bottomless pit of time'.

But I also really like the final stanza in which you end on such a positive note for the dawning of a new day.

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