A Winters Poem

Bob Pacey · Post by **Bob Pacey** » Wed Jul 15, 2015 8:43 am

A Winter Poem

I'm sitting here freezing
the air is still and quiet.

Shit it is cold

The End

Neville Briggs · Post by **Neville Briggs** » Wed Jul 15, 2015 9:05 am

I can't see any metaphor, figurative or lyrical intent. can't hear a poem in that.

Maureen K Clifford · Post by **Maureen K Clifford** » Wed Jul 15, 2015 9:56 am

More a poetic weather forecast than a poem perhaps

Bob Pacey · Post by **Bob Pacey** » Wed Jul 15, 2015 8:38 pm

You need to read it again Neville.

Close your eyes and the picture will come to you .

A Winter Poem

I'm sitting here freezing
the air is still and quiet.

Shit it is cold

The End

Post by **manfredvijars** » Thu Jul 16, 2015 8:45 am

Hey, Pacey's in Yeppoon, in an outside dunny - of course he's freezing.
(Sheeesh, give the bloke a break)

Maureen K Clifford · Post by **Maureen K Clifford** » Thu Jul 16, 2015 9:40 am

well if he was in an outside dunny Manny I doubt the air would be still and quiet

Neville Briggs · Post by **Neville Briggs** » Thu Jul 16, 2015 2:01 pm

How can I read it again if I have my eyes closed.

Bob Pacey · Post by **Bob Pacey** » Thu Jul 16, 2015 3:42 pm

Damm ya hafta xplain some things in detail

You need to read it again .

Then

Close your eyes

the picture will come to you .

Bob

Scary hey

Post by **Heather** » Thu Jul 16, 2015 7:40 pm

I think you mean "scary hey?"

Terry · Post by **Terry** » Mon Jul 20, 2015 8:40 pm

I doubt there's anything left at the bottom of that particular barrel to scrape Bob!

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