Re: Far Horizons
Posted: Thu May 05, 2016 5:36 pm
Certainly it doesn't waste words now, Terry!!
Forgive my lack of knowledge - but would it be better leaving the "all those years ago" till your last verse? Also if you break the last line "and you my love" into two - it gives you the option to repeat "my love" at the end of each verse. Or is that too structured??
I see it now
our old campsite.
A patched up tent
shady trees
and you
my love
Cheers
Shelley
Forgive my lack of knowledge - but would it be better leaving the "all those years ago" till your last verse? Also if you break the last line "and you my love" into two - it gives you the option to repeat "my love" at the end of each verse. Or is that too structured??
I see it now
our old campsite.
A patched up tent
shady trees
and you
my love
Cheers
Shelley