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Winning poem

Posted: Wed Oct 17, 2012 6:21 am
by David J Delaney
Because my poem is free verse I didn't want to upset anyone by posting with the bush poems, so here it is..... :D this normally is "centred" on the page but I can't do it here.

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This Gum’s age he could not contemplate,
zephyrs swirl through leaves,
flickers sunlight like an old film projector.

Memories stir
she’s beside him
soul mate, his love, his rock.

Adoring eyes meet as they always have.

Returning to their cottage
peeling paint
fly screen door — gauze torn — rotting.

Walking, slowly along dusty floor
past the disused stove

Glimpses, her apron over the oven door handle

Notices, cobwebs

His meals now brought on wheels.

Tired, he’s on their bed
once filled with devoted love
he drifts….

Again she stands beside him
though, now more than a vision.

Takes her hand
beneath flickering sunlight.


David J Delaney ©

Re: Winning poem

Posted: Wed Oct 17, 2012 8:14 am
by Maureen K Clifford
Love it Dave - WELL DONE - I especially like this line its very atmospheric and descriptive

flickers sunlight like an old film projector.
Brilliant

Cheers

Maureen

Re: Winning poem

Posted: Wed Oct 17, 2012 8:22 am
by Neville Briggs
Congratulations on a win. :)

Re: Winning poem

Posted: Wed Oct 17, 2012 10:07 am
by Glenny Palmer
Just to show my ignorance to the world.....I reckon ''sunlight flickers; an old film projector''..........Take notice of me David & you mighta come second!!
Well done indeed mate.
Cheeers
Glenny

Re: Winning poem

Posted: Thu Oct 18, 2012 5:38 pm
by David J Delaney
Thank you everyone.... :D ....Btw....Marty...I won't.. :lol: :lol:

Re: Winning poem

Posted: Thu Oct 18, 2012 10:06 pm
by David J Delaney
I would like to add that this quote our fearless leader used pretty well sums up most poetry, there is a lot of "so called" poetry out there (which ever form) that "tells" & not "show".

Thank you Manfred...."If a picture paints a thousand words, then that's art ... but if a few words can paint a thousand pictures - that's POETRY"

Re: Winning poem

Posted: Fri Oct 19, 2012 5:58 am
by manfredvijars
Thanks David, and congratulations. That quote is actually Graham Fredriksen's ...