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Obedience

Posted: Mon Oct 15, 2012 7:13 pm
by Bob Pacey
Obedience

(Written by Edna Greenough).

Children always do your work,
Do it well, and do not shirk;
When it's finished then you may go
and play among the hay,

When your mother says, 'Do that,'
Hurry straight away and get your hat,
Then go and do what you were told,
And there'll be no need to scold.

Posted By Bob Pacey written by my mother when she was 13

Re: Obedience

Posted: Mon Oct 15, 2012 7:46 pm
by Heather
It has a bit of a nursery rhyme sound to it Bob.

Heather :)

Re: Obedience

Posted: Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:52 pm
by Bob Pacey
Yeah i thought that as well Heather, My late aruntie told me my grandmother used to win a lot of competitions for her limericks but I never knew that mum wrote at all.

Was nice to find it on trove.


Bob

Re: Obedience

Posted: Tue Oct 16, 2012 2:34 pm
by Neville Briggs
It sounds like the rhythm of the song " Brother come and dance with me " a very famous children's song from the opera Hansel and Gretel. The first two lines are exactly that metre.

Although if that is so, your grandmother has not used the rhythm change which goes " let your hands go clap clap clap, let your feet go tap tap tap ".

Very interesting to see the possible influence on a young person's verse.

Not bad for 13 yr old. :)

Re: Obedience

Posted: Tue Oct 07, 2014 6:00 pm
by Bob Pacey
This. is my Mums poem written when she was 13 , I knew I posted it before.




Bob