Homework for April - Her name was Amadahy

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Homework for April - Her name was Amadahy

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Mon Apr 03, 2023 10:10 am

Using the prompt relating to kneeling by water .


HER NAME WAS AMADAHY – FOREST WATER ….
Maureen Clifford © The #ScribblyBarkPoet


The last nine inch nail
was pounded home
into rough hewn pine.
White camas flowers
fresh picked
still holding the dew’s tear drop
were softly placed.

He knelt at the shoreline
peering into the waters depths,
observing the silver ripples that danced
across the water as the morning breeze
kissed the grasses and fluttered the leaves
of the surrounding trees.

As dawn’s soft light
crept over the hills
he pushed the canoe out
into the silver water
starting its journey to the shadow land
where the water and pale sky merge.

In the ancient rite of the Chinook he pleaded
“Oh great spirit
whose voice I hear in the winds
welcome her without shame
for she is small and weak.

Kloshe kahkwa” (Amen)
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Re: Homework for April - Her name was Amadahy

Post by DollyDot » Tue Apr 04, 2023 8:05 am

Wow! How moving and so beautiful. Well done Maureen Clifford!

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Re: Homework for April - Her name was Amadahy

Post by Terry » Thu Apr 06, 2023 1:30 pm

Very nicely done Maureen

A touching poem to a beautiful but sad farewell.

Terry

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Re: Homework for April - Her name was Amadahy

Post by Ron » Mon Apr 10, 2023 9:45 am

Yes that's lovely Maureen, I totally agree with the other comments.
Also, to me the rhythm was excellent! well done.
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Re: Homework for April - Her name was Amadahy

Post by Shelley Hansen » Mon Apr 17, 2023 10:37 pm

Oooh! Setting the example as always by stepping out of the comfort zone and into the realm of free poetry, Maureen!

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Re: Homework for April - Her name was Amadahy

Post by Catherine Lee » Mon Apr 24, 2023 11:39 pm

Wow, this is so beautiful, Maureen! Totally agree with the others, as this is goose bump stuff!

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Re: Homework for April - Her name was Amadahy

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Mon May 01, 2023 11:20 am

Thank you everyone - your comments greatly appreciated. :D
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