Homework 4th October - Haiku

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Catherine Lee
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Homework 4th October - Haiku

Post by Catherine Lee » Sat Sep 18, 2021 6:49 pm

Oh dear, very shy indeed about attempting Haiku for some reason, but here goes:

Birds skim lush bamboo
rosy sunrise kisses snow—
Dragon Mountain wakes

Multi-coloured sails
dancing on glittering sea—
butterfly ballet

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Re: Homework 4th October - Haiku

Post by Terry » Sat Sep 18, 2021 9:09 pm

Excellent Catherine,

There's no end of possibilities when you think about it.
And better still you can really develop your own individual mind set.

Terry

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Re: Homework 4th October - Haiku

Post by Ron » Sun Sep 19, 2021 9:51 am

Ah yes, really well done Catherine!
No need for doubt at all, you have painted great images with your words and certainly mastered the 'short syllable count' challenge.
Great stuff!
Cheers
Ron

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Re: Homework 4th October - Haiku

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Mon Sep 20, 2021 12:43 pm

Nicely crafted Catherine and great to see the dragon and butterfly reference incorporated as well - a very important part ot the legends and history of this area. I love your Haiku :D
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Re: Homework 4th October - Haiku

Post by Catherine Lee » Mon Sep 20, 2021 1:00 pm

Oh, thank you so much, Terry, Ron and Maureen, you have greatly encouraged me this morning with your kind words! :)

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Re: Homework 4th October - Haiku

Post by David Judge » Mon Sep 20, 2021 1:26 pm

Whirrakee Wattle
bloom beneath the Ironbark
forests painting equinox

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Re: Homework 4th October - Haiku

Post by Ron » Mon Sep 20, 2021 5:13 pm

G'day David, and welcome to the forum! great to see you here and I look forward to reading your poems.
Did you mean to post here? as it should have gone under 'New Topic'. if you go back to writing workshop and click on the new topic button that has the pencil on it at the top, it allows you to create a new topic.
I enjoyed your haiku, good integrity, (you might like to check the syllable count in the last line though). Welcome once again.
Cheers
Ron.

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Re: Homework 4th October - Haiku

Post by David Judge » Mon Sep 20, 2021 6:09 pm

Thanks Ron. I have been following the Forum for a while and thought it was time to make a contribution ( as limited as that may be!) David

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