Homework for 4/10/21

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Homework for 4/10/21

Post by Ron » Wed Sep 15, 2021 7:05 pm

Haiku
Hope I have the rules correct. Came up with this after looking at the pics for a while.
Might have a go at a sonnet too Maureen, if the muse agrees! :)

Sweet Summers of peace,
Serenity not savaged
By Winters long War.

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Re: Homework for 4/10/21

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Wed Sep 15, 2021 10:32 pm

Oh well done Ron - I like it - I'm also reading into it a reference to the Vietnam war although that may not have been your intent. That works well, as well as the ravages of winter ... the seasonal hook.
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Re: Homework for 4/10/21

Post by Ron » Thu Sep 16, 2021 8:28 am

Thanks Maureen, yes your reading of it being about the Vietnam war was correct. ‘The long Winter of war’ so to speak. Vietnam of course hadn’t known peace for many years.
I suppose the seasonal interpretation could fit too, but I hadn’t written it with that in mind.

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Re: Homework for 4/10/21

Post by Catherine Lee » Thu Sep 16, 2021 6:31 pm

Oh, very nicely done, Ron!

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Re: Homework for 4/10/21

Post by Terry » Thu Sep 16, 2021 10:49 pm

looks good to me Ron

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Re: Homework for 4/10/21

Post by Ron » Fri Sep 17, 2021 9:43 am

Thank you Catherine and Terry for your feedback, much appreciated.
Certainly a challenge finding the words to suit the syllable count.
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Re: Homework for 4/10/21

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Fri Sep 17, 2021 3:13 pm

It is a challenge but good fun isn't it - I hope you agree :lol:
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Re: Homework for 4/10/21

Post by Ron » Fri Sep 17, 2021 5:05 pm

Thumbs up from me Maureen, it's certainly all good fun! :D
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Re: Homework for 4/10/21

Post by Shelley Hansen » Sat Sep 18, 2021 6:24 pm

Excellent, Ron! I immediately picked up on your war reference too - in fact I'm cogitating with something similar for my half-written sonnet!

Watch this space! :lol:

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Re: Homework for 4/10/21

Post by Ron » Sun Sep 19, 2021 9:39 am

Thanks Shelley.
Looking forward to reading your sonnet, I have been thinking of doing one as well, but not past the head scratching at the moment! :lol:
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