H/work for w/e 4.10.21 - Haiku

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H/work for w/e 4.10.21 - Haiku

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Tue Sep 14, 2021 10:44 pm

Just kicking this off with Haiku relating to the Halong Bay piccie. I might have a go at the sonnet as well, but at the moment no inspiration coming my way.

Hope you enjoy this .... each Haiku stands alone but also reading the 3 together, they also makes sense of the subject matter.

Beneath summer's sun
emerald waters shimmer
Halong Bay slumbers

underwater caves
give secret secure shelter
where dragons landed

limestone pillars rise
rainforests cling and survive
pristine wilderness
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Re: H/work for w/e 4.10.21 - Haiku

Post by Ron » Wed Sep 15, 2021 6:46 pm

I did enjoy that Maureen, well done! :D
Took me a while to get my head around the Haiku (in general) for some reason. :)
Interesting the way you have put the Three together, and as you say, they still stand alone. I suppose there would be no limit to what length you could go to, as long as you stuck to that benchmark.

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Post by Maureen K Clifford » Thu Sep 16, 2021 10:36 am

Glad you liked it Ron - thank you for taking the time to read and comment.

I love Haiku and find them a greater challenge than writing Bush Poetry because each word has to punch above its weight being as to how there are so few of them and so finding the right word to best express ones meaning can sometimes be very difficult.

Bussokusekika are another challenge I enjoy (see piccy) ... a form of tanka with an extra phrase of 7 on added to the end, creating a pattern of 5-7-5-7-7-7.
Bussokusekika - a rare form of Japanese poetry that consists of six lines written in a 5-7-5-7-7-7 mora pattern..jpg
Always good to stretch ourselves poetically, that way we don't get stale and hopefully our writing doesn't either.
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Re: H/work for w/e 4.10.21 - Haiku

Post by Ron » Thu Sep 16, 2021 2:20 pm

Yep, it is a challenge finding just the right word to fit with the short syllable count! And I agree, it certainly does keep the grey matter ticking over with the different forms.😄

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Re: H/work for w/e 4.10.21 - Haiku

Post by Catherine Lee » Thu Sep 16, 2021 6:34 pm

Beautiful, Maureen. Haiku is a challenge I've seldom accepted and I can appreciate what you're saying about the weight of words. You show Halong Bay very clearly here, and I really like the 'where dragons landed' line.

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Re: H/work for w/e 4.10.21 - Haiku

Post by Terry » Thu Sep 16, 2021 10:54 pm

A few words that say a lot.
I think they're great Maureen - must have a go myself.

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Re: H/work for w/e 4.10.21 - Haiku

Post by Shelley Hansen » Sat Sep 18, 2021 6:18 pm

Agree with everyone, Maureen - very succinct and well-drawn.

Like Catherine, I haven't delved into haiku - should I do so now? Mmm ... no, I'll probably belt out a sonnet! :lol:

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Re: H/work for w/e 4.10.21 - Haiku

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Mon Sep 20, 2021 12:45 pm

Oh come on Shelley - I've never known you to not master a challenge - Have a go at a Haiku - you'll be hooked in no time :lol:
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Post by Shelley Hansen » Wed Sep 29, 2021 2:42 pm

Blimey! I'm still working on the sonnet! :?
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