Home work May 2021 'Stewie'

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Home work May 2021 'Stewie'

Post by Terry » Sat May 01, 2021 2:38 pm

I have tried to use a few of the lesser or more obscure sayings, which has caused me to be a bit careless with the meter once or twice, rather that alter those old sayings.

Stewie

“Strike a flamen light mate will you get a gander there of that,
one of those new-fangled ‘thing-a-me-bobs’- or I’ll eat my hat”.
Stewie, often threatened that he’d eat his worn-out battered lid
and it had so many holes in it, perhaps at times he did.

He’s a character alright and spoke a lingo of his own,
just a true bush wordsmith who could swear in every language known.
And the air was always blue, each time he stopped to have a chat,
and liked nothing better, than to bail you up to ‘chew the fat’.

When it came to chinwagging, he’d talk the leg off a wooden chair.
going non-stop for hours without even coming up for air.
He was always stony broke and lived alone out bush somewhere.
where he tried to scratch a living but good finds were pretty rare.

Though he lived alone these days, it hadn’t always been that way,
he had known his share of Sheila’s too, but none had cared to stay.
He had also been a cricketer who should have played a test,
and was pretty good at most sport too, but liked the ‘nags’ the best.

He was never short of answers though he didn’t have a clue,
“It's a wig-wam-for a gooses-bridal” often had to do.
So I guess he was a ratbag, but was honest and was game,
Unreliable as hell, and yet I liked him just the same.

© T.E. Piggott
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Re: Home work May 2021 'Stewie'

Post by Ron » Mon May 03, 2021 3:18 pm

Another good character study Terry, Have known a few like Stewie over the years. Summed up I think in the line "he had known his share of Sheilas
too, but none had cared to stay.'' :D
Great use of the old sayings, and I agree that in poems like this they are more important than perfect meter.
Enjoyed it mate, well done,
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Re: Home work May 2021 'Stewie'

Post by Terry » Tue May 04, 2021 9:52 am

Thanks Ron

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Re: Home work May 2021 'Stewie'

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Thu May 06, 2021 9:32 am

Good one Terry - some beaut old expressions in there, don't hear stony broke used much these days. It is claimed to have an Irish origin. A lot of our old lingo is of course related back to overseas origins because of our heavy migrant population back in the day, but then we Aussies kind of laid claim and made these sayings our own.

You might want to correct a typo in there Terry, s/b talk the leg OFF :D
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Re: Home work May 2021 'Stewie'

Post by Terry » Thu May 06, 2021 11:42 am

Thanks Maureen

Fixed that as well!

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Re: Home work May 2021 'Stewie'

Post by Catherine Lee » Thu May 06, 2021 2:09 pm

Clever and enjoyable, Terry - so many old sayings included here, and they certainly bring a smile. Well done!

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Re: Home work May 2021 'Stewie'

Post by Terry » Fri May 07, 2021 10:57 am

Thanks Catherine

As Maureen says, just a bit of fun.

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Re: Home work May 2021 'Stewie'

Post by Shelley Hansen » Sun May 09, 2021 4:23 pm

I like the way you've woven the lingo into a portrait of a character, Terry. Makes the poem multi-faceted.
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Re: Home work May 2021 'Stewie'

Post by Terry » Mon May 10, 2021 10:42 pm

Thanks Shelley

A bit of fun really

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