Homework 19-5-14 Sentry

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Re: Homework 19-5-14 Sentry

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Thu May 08, 2014 8:30 pm

Really like what you have done here Marty. It has a real atmospheric feel to it - I like the idea of the old digger standing his watch alongside the younger bloke - I'm sure they do.
The turned up hat, laconic air , toned muscles well defined
Great description - well done.

You gone off punctuation? :lol:
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Re: Homework 19-5-14 Sentry

Post by Neville Briggs » Fri May 09, 2014 6:42 am

I have done guard duty many times, the most profound pseudo-philosophical thoughts that I had then, were that I was totally bored and wished to hell I was out of there to ease my aching back and legs.
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Re: Homework 19-5-14 Sentry

Post by Bob Pacey » Fri May 09, 2014 7:47 am

I can give you some of my punctuations Marty I very seldom use them either.

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Re: Homework 19-5-14 Sentry

Post by Heather » Fri May 09, 2014 3:23 pm

You should have done some star jumps Neville - that would have livened things up - for everyone! :lol:
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Re: Homework 19-5-14 Sentry

Post by Bob Pacey » Fri May 09, 2014 3:54 pm

I remember an old joke about the old guard with his fly undone !


Nup cannot tell it here.

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Re: Homework 19-5-14 Sentry

Post by mummsie » Fri May 09, 2014 6:56 pm

some great lines there Marty-enjoyed it

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Re: Homework 19-5-14 Sentry

Post by Terry » Sun May 11, 2014 8:35 pm

I agree with Sue

Well done Marty.

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