Homework w/e 6.2.12 Mountain View

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Re: Homework w/e 6.2.12 Mountain View

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Mon Feb 06, 2012 5:59 pm

I've never read that one before Heather - it's lovely.
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Re: Homework w/e 6.2.12 Mountain View

Post by Heather » Mon Feb 06, 2012 6:50 pm

I'll post the whole poem under general poetry Maureen rather than take up Robyn's thread. :)

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Re: Homework w/e 6.2.12 Mountain View

Post by Robyn » Mon Feb 06, 2012 8:38 pm

I'm a big fan of Henry's... there's so much in his work!
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Re: Homework w/e 6.2.12 Mountain View

Post by Heather » Mon Feb 06, 2012 8:42 pm

Me too Robyn. I never finish the half dozen books I have on Lawson because I keep going back to the beginning... :)

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Re: Homework w/e 6.2.12 Mountain View

Post by Mal McLean » Mon Feb 06, 2012 8:53 pm

I never discuss feminine endings!

PSSST...Manny, whats's a feminine ending? :oops:

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Re: Homework w/e 6.2.12 Mountain View

Post by Zondrae » Mon Feb 13, 2012 6:07 pm

Wow,

You girls are leaving this old chook standing.

Robyn, what I wish to say is your imagery is wonderful. And by way of advice - always check that your grammar is correct. I'm not too good at that myself so I am not saying you have made any errors, only offering a small titbit of advice. Even though it is a poem it still should conform to the rules. eg Each sentence should begin with a capital letter and have a verb in it and please don't forget those little full stops. Having said that, I guess I have to be doubly careful to check everything I post from now on. Keep at it you are certainly on the right track.
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Re: Homework w/e 6.2.12 Mountain View

Post by Neville Briggs » Mon Feb 13, 2012 6:48 pm

A feminine ending Mal, is an extra unstressed syllable in a line.

e.g. You make a line that ends upon a beat
or make a line that has an unstressed ending
I like to make the lines all resolute
not hesitating and a sort of sissy


the second and fourth line has a " feminine" ending. I think ???? :roll:
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