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Nevertire Nevertire Outback Town Homework 04/07/11

Posted: Wed Jun 22, 2011 12:55 am
by mummsie
Had a bit of fun with this one
Nevertire Nevertire

Nevertire. Nevertire - outback town,
settled on the plains where the sun beats down,
where bullock wagons once etched a long, dry trail,
and Cobb & Co coaches brought in kin and mail.

Winds are blowing, winds are blowing houses down.
They worked from dawn till whistle blow to save the town,
but natures forces beat them. They had much to fix,
from a cyclone that blew through in eighteen ninety six.

Cotton growing. Cotton, growing everywhere.
Flower heads are swaying in the hot dry air,
fibre bolls are splitting for they're under strain,
ready for the harvest 'cross the great grey plain.

Kangaroos. Kangaroos and emus.To
countless in their numbers, roam this land true blue.
The drought it seems to help the saltbush grow, how strange.
It's conquered all the elements of climate change.

Busy farmers, busy farmers go to town,
call into the local for their cares to drown,
tell each other troubles over foaming ale,
and check the papers snap adds, see what's up for sale.

Sue Pearce

Re: Nevertire Nevertire Outback Town Homework 04/07/11

Posted: Wed Jun 22, 2011 8:25 am
by Maureen K Clifford
Onya Sue - see you did your 'homework' in more ways than one. :lol:

Just a nit pick - IMO this would be a better read with some punctuation, especially since you are playing around with the words, the reader needs to know where to pause in the reading, and this will give it additional impact. I like it. Thought it was a great name for a town

Cheers

Maureen

Re: Nevertire Nevertire Outback Town Homework 04/07/11

Posted: Wed Jun 22, 2011 8:36 am
by mummsie
Thanks Maureen, just a bit of fun this one, never been good at punctuation, but I think it reads better now.
Cheers

Re: Nevertire Nevertire Outback Town Homework 04/07/11

Posted: Wed Jun 22, 2011 3:43 pm
by Neville Briggs
I thought that was great Sue ! The repeat at the first line of each stanza gives it a swing which I think is very suitable for the theme and style.
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