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David Judge
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Haiku

Post by David Judge » Mon Sep 20, 2021 6:12 pm

My attempt at a Haiku ( revised with help from Ron)
Whirrakee Wattle
bloom beneath the Iron Bark
painting equinox

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Re: Haiku

Post by Ron » Mon Sep 20, 2021 7:23 pm

Good on you David, well done!
Cheers
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Catherine Lee
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Re: Haiku

Post by Catherine Lee » Tue Sep 21, 2021 12:00 pm

Very nicely done, David, this paints a very clear picture - Love the wattle!

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Re: Haiku

Post by David Judge » Tue Sep 21, 2021 2:26 pm

Thank you Ron and Catherine. I live next to Greater Bendigo National Park which is in full bloom at the moment hence the inspiration. Not too sure about Haikus as an ongoing interest though. I enjoy the ongoing challenge of rhyme and metre as a form of self-expression.

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Re: Haiku

Post by Terry » Tue Sep 21, 2021 3:01 pm

You have done well David.

And by the way welcome to homework (if you haven't been on here before that is?)

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Re: Haiku

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Tue Sep 21, 2021 3:04 pm

I was not familiar with the particular species of wattle - Whirrakee Wattle (Acacia williamsonii) - but it is certainly a lovely wattle and quite rare apparently, growing in just a few areas. Your haiku captures it quite delightfully and nice to think of it being protected by the big old Iron Bark's. I am particularly fond of both of these species of trees so your Haiku certainly resonated with me.

We explore all different types of poetry here from time to time. It does us all good to step outside of our comfort zone on occasions :lol: So feel free to join with us. No harsh criticisms or nasty comments here mate - we are very supportive of each other.
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Re: Haiku

Post by Shelley Hansen » Wed Sep 29, 2021 2:44 pm

Welcome David! So nice to see you joining our Forum and I'm sure you will be a valued contributor.

I just love the closing line "painting equinox". That is a brilliant metaphor!

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