Homeworh 2/6/14 Haiku

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Terry
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Homeworh 2/6/14 Haiku

Post by Terry » Tue May 20, 2014 12:19 pm

I know nothing about these Maureen; don’t even know if these are written correctly


HAIKU’s

Watch the setting sun
then comes silence all around
peacefulness at last.


Ripples formed on sand
desert winds that always blow
cruel mirages.


T.E. Piggott

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Re: Homeworh 2/6/14 Haiku

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Tue May 20, 2014 6:03 pm

They are perfectly fine Terry because you fulfilled the brief of a Haiku styled bush poem and these are actually quite lovely and thank you for having a go. Did you find them difficult? Just curious
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Re: Homeworh 2/6/14 Haiku

Post by Terry » Wed May 21, 2014 11:14 am

Not really Maureen
But I can see to be really good at them, you need to put a lot of thought into it.
It seems to me that you're trying paint a descriptive picture with very few strokes of the brush.

I will have a go at another couple and take a little more time and see if that helps.

Thanks Maureen

Terry

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