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Re: Homework week ended 19-5-14 Untitled

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Thu May 08, 2014 8:45 pm

I like this Marty - short but says a lot - Times markers perhaps for a title

To our future we are led might work better for you -although doubtless the future might be a heavy load :lol:

2nd verse line 3 you have used the word 'on' twice really close together - perhaps you might consider using we struggle through to break that up. Just a suggestion.

Thanks Marty and good on you for having 2 shots at the homework - totally different and both good.
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Re: Homework week ended 19-5-14 Untitled

Post by Bob Pacey » Fri May 09, 2014 7:50 am

These are the short verses that I sometimes frame and put on the wall for a while Marty well done.

Yep I agree with Maureen re the on on line.

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