I Hate These

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Terry
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I Hate These

Post by Terry » Wed Sep 12, 2012 6:58 pm

I HATE THESE

In days gone by he used to think
how sinful it must be to drink,
an alcoholic type of brew
that wiped out those who had a few,
each time they ventured into town.

Then as he aged he was to find,
he soon began to change his mind.
Eventually he sinned as well
so now was doomed to go to hell,
each time he ventured into town.


© T.E. Piggott

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Re: I Hate These

Post by mummsie » Wed Sep 12, 2012 7:32 pm

Now how hard was that Terry. Good one.

Sue
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Re: I Hate These

Post by Terry » Wed Sep 12, 2012 8:22 pm

Hi Sue,

I'm still not a fan.

Cheers Terry

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Re: I Hate These

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Wed Sep 12, 2012 8:26 pm

Terry in all honesty neither am I but they stretch the mind and make us think outside the square and you nailed it. Good on you. WOOHOO :lol: :lol: :lol: and thank you for having a shot at it.

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Re: I Hate These

Post by Terry » Wed Sep 12, 2012 10:03 pm

Hi Maureen,

I didn't mean there was anything wrong with them and as you say they do make you think a little different than usual.

This is the first time I've actually done one myself and one thing I learned from it is. If I was doing it again I'd think hard about what letters I would use and try to pick ones with plenty of word options and also whether with the letters chosen I would be better starting with a stressed or unstressed syllable.

Cheers Terry

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