It's amazing the work done in the past just by sheer muscle power of the horses.
You have worked in a few really good lines which show more than tell, good strong images that are perfect for the theme I think. Lines like...the drivers up high on the box..polish on leather...flared nostrils...loose chains clattering ( particularly good ) ..blade of the slaughterman's knife ( sad but reality )
War Horses
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Re: War Horses
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" Prose is description, poetry is presence " Les Murray.
" Prose is description, poetry is presence " Les Murray.
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Re: War Horses
Great poem Marty!!!
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