Feet of Clay

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r.magnay
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Re: Feet of Clay

Post by r.magnay » Tue Mar 22, 2011 6:19 am

.....ah, that would be Andy you refer to...."Andy sang, Andy watched Andy waited for....." Yeah, yeah I know....I'll leave now..... 8-)
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Dave Smith
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Re: Feet of Clay

Post by Dave Smith » Tue Mar 22, 2011 2:54 pm

Good one Ross :lol:

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Glenny Palmer
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Re: Feet of Clay

Post by Glenny Palmer » Thu Mar 24, 2011 11:28 pm

'As far as I know it's a type of near rhyme or slant rhyme , perhaps you could call it assonance'

Go to your room Neville! (that's a bit severe, sorry luv).....

Newbies often tell me that they 'have read' my tutorial. tch tch. Neville, can you help me out here....'tutorial'... thesaurus description please. I think it'll say something along the lines of repeatedly reading aka studying...a bit at a time...?

Anyway this is all in there. Ta Zondrae...you save me so much time. Your critique is correct IMO. Apart from technicalities, you will see an example of singular/plural rhyme in 'Unstrained', that when corrected conveys so much more 'power'.

'Assonance':
In the song 'Don't It Make My Brown Eyes Blue'.
'I'll be sad when you're goneI'll just cry all night long....'
'gone' & long' are assonance...not rhyme.

Hellooo Nerelie. Great to see you posting on here. Sing out next time you see me in Coles & we'll have a cuppa & a chat?

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Re: Feet of Clay

Post by Neville Briggs » Fri Mar 25, 2011 2:07 pm

I'll defer to your assonance Glenny. I did say perhaps, I wasn't exactly sure how assonance might be used as a rhyming end word.
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" Prose is description, poetry is presence " Les Murray.

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