MEL AN' OMAR

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MEL AN' OMAR

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Wed Nov 10, 2010 3:44 pm

MEL AN' OMAR



Mel and Omar loved the summer – loved the heat and loved the sands
loved the beaches and the water both liked looking deeply tanned.
Slathered on the cocoa butter, basted every joint and breast
slow rotated on the beach towel – slow cooked there beside the rest.

Every summer Mel and Omar spent their holidays in sun
either on the Gold Coast Queensland or up north where Marlin run.
Surfing, fishing, water skiing, jogging daily on the beach
Never wore a hat or T shirt – Factor 30 out of reach.

Now it seems they’re somewhat spotty some protrusions have appeared
quite apart from looking grotty Mel and Omar are affeared
words are bandied round the surgery cancer, sun spots, BCC
flesh is cut, biopsies taken – we will see what we will see.

Oh alas results appalling – seems the news is really bad
second stage of Carcinoma – the prognosis that they had.
Too late now to heed the warnings – slip, slap, slop, seemed too absurd
now it seems that Mel and Omar know the Melanoma word.
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Re: MEL AN' OMAR

Post by Heather » Wed Nov 10, 2010 5:27 pm

If only Mel an' Omar knew then what we know now hey Maureen! Geez you're dag! The cancer council should employ you.

Heather :lol:

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Re: MEL AN' OMAR

Post by Zondrae » Wed Nov 10, 2010 6:59 pm

Evening girls,

Problem is that we have done the 'slip. slop. slap' bit too well. Now we all have vitamin D deficiency.
I know, - it is better to have to take a vitamin pill than to die of Melanoma.

Great poem Maureen. Taking a light hearted look can often get a message across better than a 'grim reaper' style ad.
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Re: MEL AN' OMAR

Post by Trisha Patterson » Wed Nov 10, 2010 7:18 pm

Good one Maureen!!
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Re: MEL AN' OMAR

Post by Neville Briggs » Thu Nov 11, 2010 8:54 am

Maureen, you naughty girl :o you'll get into trouble from the rhyming police for using "sands" and " tanned " as a rhyming pair. I got panned for using " grass" and "passed' in one of my comp entries.

When I become a judge your slant rhyme will pass muster, no problem. ;)

I relate to your concern, I've got the pommie skin, courtesy of my mother. The beach is no place for us whitefellas.


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Re: MEL AN' OMAR

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Thu Nov 11, 2010 10:24 pm

Can relate to the pommie skin Neville and why pray tell should sand and tanned not be a rhyme? It is like earth and turf - never got that one either and it is no urfley good trying to explain it.............. :lol: Some people are just so precious :roll:

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Re: MEL AN' OMAR

Post by Neville Briggs » Fri Nov 12, 2010 3:01 pm

Maureen, I tought I taw " sands with a s.s.and tanned with a d.d.d"
that could be problematic for those pedantic rhymers.

Neville ;) .
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