Re: Silver Moon
Posted: Mon Apr 04, 2011 9:59 am
Hi Zondrae
Loved this poem when I first read it, and love it now!!
It was at the Pinnacles at Cervantes that I read your poem out, and a copy of it went back over seas - it was a full moon tour of the Pinnacles, and as I finished reading it, there was a 'rainbow' around the moon. A beautiful setting for a wonderful poem!
Regarding offering comments, I don't think anyone should be afraid of offering comments on the public forum - especially if some specifically asks for comments. As already mentioned, it is up to the author of the poem as to whether he/she takes the comments on board or not - many changes offered can change the context of a poem in a subtle ( and not so subtle way!)
I will offer my comments, when asked, on the forum rather than via a PM - not because I think I know it all, but because I feel that all comments are of benefit to others that are also reading the post, and I always try to reassure the author that it is their poem, and I don't have an issue if my comments are not what they are looking for. Hopefully, I deliver the comments in a manner that doesn't upset them. If you send your comments via a PM no one else gets to see them (which may be a good thing!! lol). Even someone who is still learning, or has trouble with rhyme and meter can offer a comment which may just trigger a response in the author that will lead on to the change they are looking for. I used to have a friend read all my poems - she doesn't know anything about writing poetry, but she could very clearly tell me if something did not work for her. And if we hope to sell our poetry to the average Joe Bloggs on the street, we have to know that is readable and catching for them.
Loved this poem when I first read it, and love it now!!
It was at the Pinnacles at Cervantes that I read your poem out, and a copy of it went back over seas - it was a full moon tour of the Pinnacles, and as I finished reading it, there was a 'rainbow' around the moon. A beautiful setting for a wonderful poem!
Regarding offering comments, I don't think anyone should be afraid of offering comments on the public forum - especially if some specifically asks for comments. As already mentioned, it is up to the author of the poem as to whether he/she takes the comments on board or not - many changes offered can change the context of a poem in a subtle ( and not so subtle way!)
I will offer my comments, when asked, on the forum rather than via a PM - not because I think I know it all, but because I feel that all comments are of benefit to others that are also reading the post, and I always try to reassure the author that it is their poem, and I don't have an issue if my comments are not what they are looking for. Hopefully, I deliver the comments in a manner that doesn't upset them. If you send your comments via a PM no one else gets to see them (which may be a good thing!! lol). Even someone who is still learning, or has trouble with rhyme and meter can offer a comment which may just trigger a response in the author that will lead on to the change they are looking for. I used to have a friend read all my poems - she doesn't know anything about writing poetry, but she could very clearly tell me if something did not work for her. And if we hope to sell our poetry to the average Joe Bloggs on the street, we have to know that is readable and catching for them.