ABPA - Australian Bush Poets Association

Thanks everyone for your comments - haven't had a chance to do much on the forum lately.
It's funny isn't it - I like this poem also, but have never done much with it - entered it in that first competition, and that is all.
But reading it again brings me back to some comments Neville wrote a while back about how important he believes it is to 'paint a picture' rather than using words, and I feel that I have somehow veered away from doing that a little bit. I find I tend to use words to create a feeling, more so than painting a picture now. Must stop being lazy and get back to painting those pictures!!!

Catchya
IRene

Yes Irene. You indeed painted a picture
Cheers
Val W

A bit of Vintage Irene Here,
Beautifully written as always.

Terry

Anyone notice the rhyme in the first two lines in the final stanza?

I wonder why I left my home to travel far away,
to chase the mighty dollar and have fun along the way.
I’ve searched in vain for what I want, and finally I know
I have it all among the fields where golden wheatheads grow.

Heather

Hi Heather,
I did but thought I had better leave it alone after my query in the other forum. I always knew it was legit but for some reason it just didn't look right as I had used it, I only really brought op the subject as a point of interest. But as is often the case we all including myself got a bit distracted with other aspects of the stanza I used as an example. The plus side was that a lot of good ideas cropped up.

Cheers Terry

Ah, can't put one over you Heather!!!

G'day Irene . . . great stuff, I think Neville put it best by saying your words and rhythm have a beautiful lilt to them. Very enjoyable read.

Cheers, Marty

I enjoyed country life the best Irene and I hope my children enjoyed the years they spent there.

Good read.



Merv.