haiku

[Maureen K Clifford]

Got to confess that I love them. It takes me longer to do a Haiku than it does a to write a Bush verse because of the intricacies of getting the meaning just right with so few words at your disposal.

They are a real challenge that I am still trying to master successfully

[Neville Briggs]

Spot on Maureen.

I think it is a big mistake to think that any form of poetry is easy.

All poetry, ALL poetry is hard work.

[warooa]

bush poetry may be easy . . . but good bush poetry can be hard (yet satisfying) work.

Marty

[Zondrae]

And..
If we were to really delve into the pure Haiku... they are so very difficult to do properly. Firstly they must be based in the 'natural' world; that is something connected to nature. There is also a rule about the relationship between the first and final line. I don't know exactly what it is but I know the form is too difficult for me to write them properly. Oh yes I can write 5.7.5 syllables and make sense ... in English. But the finer points, the very subtle, are beyond my capabilities.

As Neville has said the form is more suited to a tonal language (Asian). I read my first Haiku when I was 15. It has so many levels that I have never forgotten it.

There is noone here
and yet I am not lonely.
Orange Blossom smell.

The mind that is open to learning is a beautiful thing but the closed mind is an insult to the universe.

[Bob Pacey]

Last time I opened my mind.

Sometimes my mind wanders; other times it leaves completely.

Bob

[Maureen K Clifford]

But you have to see the picture behind the words Marty to appreciate the beauty and the simplicity of it

There is none here
and yet I am not lonely.
Orange Blossom smell.

The MC is somewhere completely alone, a beach, a secluded courtyard, a room????? and yet despite that, the scent of the orange blossom recalls happy memories of times spent with family, friends and loved ones and those memories fill the MC with joy, and remembering those times he/she is not alone at all.

Now don't you think that is lovely?

[manfredvijars]

My series of LOW-kus (ALL about Nature)


Wetsuit Lowku (four-part series)

1
Swimming with dolphins
I fart in my new wet suit
(now floating on top)

2
oops, I followed through ...
(no outlet for relieving)
now squishy and warm

3
didn't read label
'follow through' was perilous
new wet suit broken

4
Great Barrier Reef
in danger of pollution
from boundless farting
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[Maureen K Clifford]

couth and culture seems
it appears somewhat lacking
from esteemed leader

[David J Delaney]

Well while were're at it, I do enjoy Haiku & Tanka.

No. 1

Morning hark of crows
Sun warms Australian bush
Life is to be lived.

David J Delaney
11/03/2010 ©



No. 3

Mist on mountains high
Bellbirds sing through valleys green
Breathtaking beauty

David J Delaney
12/03/2010 ©



No. 4

I Lie in tall grass
Cloudless sky now feels in reach
Childhood memories

David J Delaney
12/03/2010 ©



No. 5

Oceans rolling waves
Willy willy's desert dance
Timeless ancient land

David J Delaney
20/03/2010 ©


Tanka.

Whales

In this great expanse
Whales breach the oceans surface
show their weathered tail
then splash in magnificence
on their yearly migration.

David J Delaney
25/06/2010 ©


Lost life

Standing on the beach
their way of life unchanged
watch as white men land,
now wise elders hang their heads
for tribal ways won’t remain

David J Delaney
28/06/2010 ©


Soldiers thoughts

Carefully I walk
rifle firmly clasped in hands
thoughts of family,
with enemy hidden well
will deadly bullets find me.

David J Delaney
25/06/2010 ©

[David J Delaney]

No worries Marty, it is not everyones cuppa & while Aussie bush poetry is my no.1 love, I am enjoying learning & appreciating what is involved in other forms of poetry, jeeeze!!..I even had a go at a soliloquy..