Homework 18/5 CAN I HELP YOU

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Homework 18/5 CAN I HELP YOU

Post by Neville Briggs » Sun May 17, 2020 6:19 pm

CAN I HELP YOU ?

There is no need to panic
no need to faint from fear.
Try not to shrink in terror
from who is ruling here.
Just answer all the questions
and fill the proper form,
and keep your gaze away from looks
you're sure are filled with scorn.
Keep check on raw emotions,
try not to burst in tears,
she might not be the sentry
of steel as she appears.
So you just hold your ticket,
your turn is on the list,
don't move until you're summoned
by Ms Receptionist.
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Re: Homework 18/5 CAN I HELP YOU

Post by Catherine Lee » Sun May 17, 2020 7:14 pm

Oh, well done. Neville - a completely different and unexpected take! I enjoyed reading this - and confess that I once started crying with nerves as I waited in a dental surgery...(yes, as an adult - dentists remain one of my biggest fears!) :lol:

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Re: Homework 18/5 CAN I HELP YOU

Post by Neville Briggs » Sun May 17, 2020 7:36 pm

Thank you Catherine. Fierce receptionists are my greatest fear :lol:
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Re: Homework 18/5 CAN I HELP YOU

Post by r.magnay » Mon May 18, 2020 5:48 pm

...the person who hands out the invoice as you leave the dentist is the scary one...
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Re: Homework 18/5 CAN I HELP YOU

Post by Terry » Mon May 18, 2020 7:34 pm

Hi Neville

Good one, a story of everyone's fears at times.
and as Ross said, they don't come much scarier than the Dentists bill,
with the possible exception of seeing the Dentists themselves.

Cheers

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Post by Maureen K Clifford » Tue May 19, 2020 10:32 pm

Very clever Neville - completely out of left field for that one - well done
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Post by Shelley Hansen » Wed May 20, 2020 11:43 am

Oh, so true, Neville!

Years ago the head receptionist at our doctor's surgery was so intimidating, I used to dread every visit. From demanding in a loud voice that you describe your symptoms to her in front of a waiting room of people, and then diagnosing you before you even saw the doctor, to dictating how many children you should have (and speculating on why you weren't pregnant at that very moment), to patronisingly dismissing older folk in particular ... she was a nightmare!

Mmm - I've just had a thought - she would be old herself now. Wonder how it feels?

Your poem sent the hairs up on the back of my neck! Great left-field take on the prompts.

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Re: Homework 18/5 CAN I HELP YOU

Post by Neville Briggs » Tue Jun 02, 2020 10:10 am

Thank you for reading and replying, Ross, Maureen, Terry and Shelley. Funny how everyone can relate to that :lol: :lol:
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