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Homework 18/11/19 - I Wandered Through a Dust-Filled Cloud

Posted: Tue Nov 12, 2019 9:48 pm
by Shelley
This is an interesting challenge you've set for us, Maureen and Terry! A great idea to emulate the old poets, Terry - and a thought-provoking mixture of prompts, Maureen. I have always liked the English sestet form, so I have modelled my poem on William Wordsworths "Daffodils", which has the alternate title "I Wandered Lonely As a Cloud". The current catastrophic bushfire conditions seemed to fit in with the prompts, so here goes ...

I Wandered Through a Dust-Filled Cloud
© Shelley Hansen 12/11/19

I wandered through a dust-filled cloud,
a dry leaf carpet underfoot.
The curlew’s cry rang sad and loud
as if to warn of ashy soot
so soon to fall with ember rain
across the dry and gasping plain.

Beyond, a distant orange blaze
danced devil-like on hillside’s crest,
and through the thick and smoke-filled haze
drew ever closer from the west.
The homestead stood aloft and tall,
to fight the greatest fight of all.

Against the sky, the peaceful blue
of backyard jacaranda trees
seemed almost with its vibrant hue
to mock the rising gusty breeze
that deepened to a howling gale,
transporting firesparks in its trail.

The crews prepared to face the flame -
with pick and shovel, wrought a break.
While media debated blame
they carried on, too tired to take
a rest for damper, Billy tea.
Day merged with night, incessantly.

The homestead, bathed in eerie light,
appeared to wait for certain doom,
when suddenly, across the night
a bolt of lightning lit the gloom –
infusing hearts with soaring hope,
renewing strength to rise and cope.

The future will be faced by men
who push their borders further out.
Hard times will pass, and come again
with fire and flood, and endless drought.
But now – the rain! We dance with glee
around the jacaranda tree.

Re: Homework 18/11/19 - I Wandered Through a Dust-Filled Cloud

Posted: Wed Nov 13, 2019 5:06 pm
by Maureen K Clifford
WOW! You nailed it with this one Shelley, well done, that is an excellent use of the prompts and your poem is right on target with the cataclysmic event that are surrounding us

Re: Homework 18/11/19 - I Wandered Through a Dust-Filled Cloud

Posted: Fri Nov 15, 2019 5:24 pm
by Shelley
Thanks Maureen!

Yes, we are in dangerous surroundings. Today we had one fire to the north of us and one to the west. Then a small one started in bushland quite nearby but was quickly contained. Thankfully no danger to us at the moment, but the air quality was quite poor due to smoke. The sound of screaming fire sirens is becoming our daily soundtrack, unfortunately.

Cheers
Shelley

Re: Homework 18/11/19 - I Wandered Through a Dust-Filled Cloud

Posted: Sat Nov 16, 2019 7:43 pm
by Catherine Lee
Brilliance from you as usual, Shelley! So topical too, and written in perfect metre and rhyme. Love it!

Re: Homework 18/11/19 - I Wandered Through a Dust-Filled Cloud

Posted: Mon Nov 18, 2019 12:16 pm
by Terry
You have tapped into the very essence of that lovely poem Shelley.
Especially in the early part and have maintained it throughout the poem.

The English language is capable of great beauty but few can show it as its best.
You have made a pretty good effort of it here.

Cheers

Terry

Re: Homework 18/11/19 - I Wandered Through a Dust-Filled Cloud

Posted: Tue Nov 19, 2019 4:42 pm
by Shelley
Thanks Catherine and Terry! High praise indeed!

I agree with you Terry, it has been quite a challenge to emulate the master English poets. But it was fun and thank you for suggesting it!

Cheers
Shelley

Re: Homework 18/11/19 - I Wandered Through a Dust-Filled Cloud

Posted: Fri Nov 22, 2019 9:05 am
by Neville Briggs
That is very good Shelley, what can I say, they have said it :D :D

Re: Homework 18/11/19 - I Wandered Through a Dust-Filled Cloud

Posted: Fri Nov 29, 2019 5:48 pm
by Shelley
Thank you so much Neville - you are a discriminating and knowledgeable reader and writer - so I really appreciate your comments.

Cheers
Shelley