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Homework 18.11.2019

Posted: Sun Nov 03, 2019 2:01 pm
by Neville Briggs
SPRING IN OZ


Among the dry leaves,
dark limb jacarandas bloom,
spreading a carpet
of thick fluoro lilac pile.
It's almost time of year's end.

The eucalyptus shed
their bark like moulting snakes.
Faced with the future
of time and chance for burning
they must stay , in the hard times.

Re: Homework 18.11.2019

Posted: Sat Nov 09, 2019 2:55 pm
by Maureen K Clifford
That is lovely Neville and certainly fits for this time of year when the Jacaranda's are sharing their glorious blooms. Nicely crafted :D

Re: Homework 18.11.2019

Posted: Sun Nov 10, 2019 4:26 pm
by Neville Briggs
Thanks Maureen :) A bit of Waka (or Tanka if you like).

Re: Homework 18.11.2019

Posted: Mon Nov 11, 2019 10:26 pm
by Shelley
Excellent, Neville. I really like the way you have painted the scene with such an economy of words.

Re: Homework 18.11.2019

Posted: Sat Nov 16, 2019 7:44 pm
by Catherine Lee
Yes, a beautiful picture Neville - I really miss seeing the jacaranda in bloom. This is lovely

Re: Homework 18.11.2019

Posted: Sun Nov 17, 2019 9:45 am
by Neville Briggs
Thanks Shelley Thanks Catherine.

I think that economy of words is one of the identifying marks of poetry. If that is what I aim for then I fear that I won't fit into the bush poetry scene , when I look at recent winners of bush poetry competitions they are all very long narrative works.

Re: Homework 18.11.2019

Posted: Sun Nov 17, 2019 5:09 pm
by Maureen K Clifford
That is true Neville, most are but not always the case. I personally think it more difficult to write a good tanka or haiku because of the paucity of words. Each word has to punch above its weight and you always seem to achieve that goal.

Re: Homework 18.11.2019

Posted: Mon Nov 18, 2019 11:49 am
by Terry
Nice Neville,
But there's nothing wrong with bush poetry either as long as it's well written with a good story.
I agree with you on one thing though, some poems are far too long - it's got to be a very good poem to go more than say 40 lines in my opinion.
These days the only thing I seem to be writing are short homework poems - just haven't got the time at the moment for anything else.

Cheers

Terry

Re: Homework 18.11.2019

Posted: Tue Nov 19, 2019 4:31 pm
by Shelley
Horses for courses I suppose, Neville.

I agree with Terry - no point in blathering on for ever if you have said what you need to say. But then some stories are more involved and need the extra length to do them justice.

Regardless of length or lack of it, a good poem Is a good poem.

Cheers
Shelley

Re: Homework 18.11.2019

Posted: Fri Nov 22, 2019 9:06 am
by Neville Briggs
Thanks for the comments, Maureen, Terry, Shelley.