Homework 18.11.2019

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Homework 18.11.2019

Post by Neville Briggs » Sun Nov 03, 2019 2:01 pm

SPRING IN OZ


Among the dry leaves,
dark limb jacarandas bloom,
spreading a carpet
of thick fluoro lilac pile.
It's almost time of year's end.

The eucalyptus shed
their bark like moulting snakes.
Faced with the future
of time and chance for burning
they must stay , in the hard times.
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Re: Homework 18.11.2019

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Sat Nov 09, 2019 2:55 pm

That is lovely Neville and certainly fits for this time of year when the Jacaranda's are sharing their glorious blooms. Nicely crafted :D
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Post by Neville Briggs » Sun Nov 10, 2019 4:26 pm

Thanks Maureen :) A bit of Waka (or Tanka if you like).
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Post by Shelley » Mon Nov 11, 2019 10:26 pm

Excellent, Neville. I really like the way you have painted the scene with such an economy of words.
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Re: Homework 18.11.2019

Post by Catherine Lee » Sat Nov 16, 2019 7:44 pm

Yes, a beautiful picture Neville - I really miss seeing the jacaranda in bloom. This is lovely

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Re: Homework 18.11.2019

Post by Neville Briggs » Sun Nov 17, 2019 9:45 am

Thanks Shelley Thanks Catherine.

I think that economy of words is one of the identifying marks of poetry. If that is what I aim for then I fear that I won't fit into the bush poetry scene , when I look at recent winners of bush poetry competitions they are all very long narrative works.
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Post by Maureen K Clifford » Sun Nov 17, 2019 5:09 pm

That is true Neville, most are but not always the case. I personally think it more difficult to write a good tanka or haiku because of the paucity of words. Each word has to punch above its weight and you always seem to achieve that goal.
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Re: Homework 18.11.2019

Post by Terry » Mon Nov 18, 2019 11:49 am

Nice Neville,
But there's nothing wrong with bush poetry either as long as it's well written with a good story.
I agree with you on one thing though, some poems are far too long - it's got to be a very good poem to go more than say 40 lines in my opinion.
These days the only thing I seem to be writing are short homework poems - just haven't got the time at the moment for anything else.

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Post by Shelley » Tue Nov 19, 2019 4:31 pm

Horses for courses I suppose, Neville.

I agree with Terry - no point in blathering on for ever if you have said what you need to say. But then some stories are more involved and need the extra length to do them justice.

Regardless of length or lack of it, a good poem Is a good poem.

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Re: Homework 18.11.2019

Post by Neville Briggs » Fri Nov 22, 2019 9:06 am

Thanks for the comments, Maureen, Terry, Shelley.
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