Homework W/E june 27 - 'Annette'

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Homework W/E june 27 - 'Annette'

Post by Terry » Fri May 31, 2019 10:51 am

Annette

Could it be so long ago? - Yet still it lingers in my mind;
surely for the briefest moment then, the stars had all aligned.
I can see it as it was that night, for how could I forget,
rare are moments such as this, although we’d only recent met.

There was music in the air that night just drifting on the breeze,
that had stirred the Chinese lantern’s, so they flickered through the trees.
While the fading flush across the bay showed where the sun had set
and my heart was beating wildly, as I walked with you Annette.

Far too young to know of love, or heed a poet’s sound advice;
Just a boy of twenty-two, my knowledge never would suffice.
Looking back, I now suspect, you too like me, were much the same,
two young innocents in worldly ways; two hearts that night aflame.

There beneath the stirring palms we strolled contented hand in hand;
all those years ago, along a tropic beach of silver sand.
Once I dreamt of fortunes vast, that surely one day I would get,
now my dreams are of more precious things, I dream of you Annette.

© T. E. Piggott

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Re: Homework W/E june 27 - 'Annette'

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Fri May 31, 2019 12:46 pm

Oh a bit or romance - how lovely Terry. Always nice to read something a little softer, especially when you blokes write it. Nicely done Terry and you made good use of the prompt as well, just snuck it in there :lol: The Chinese Lanterns were a nice touch - atmospheric. I liked that.
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Re: Homework W/E june 27 - 'Annette'

Post by Neville Briggs » Mon Jun 03, 2019 1:06 pm

Good to see you posting Terry. Very romantic , I see in my minds eye the tropic beach scene. :) :)
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Re: Homework W/E june 27 - 'Annette'

Post by Terry » Mon Jun 03, 2019 8:26 pm

Hi Maureen and Neville

There's a wee smidgen of truth in this.
It was in Darwin about 62 or 63 if I remember right, and I was leaving next day for Coober Pedy to try my luck at opal mining.
It was all quite innocent really ( not even sure of her name now), In those days you still were very much boy at 22 - well I was anyway.
She was on some sort of a bus tour and was trying to evade the attentions of the tour leader and no doubt saw me as a way of avoiding him.

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Re: Homework W/E june 27 - 'Annette'

Post by Shelley Hansen » Wed Jun 05, 2019 3:09 pm

Ah, as the others have said, there is nothing like a tale of young romance!

It's fun when you can take a real incident, add a swirl of spicy poetic licence, stir gently - and bake to perfection!

Great stuff, Terry!

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Re: Homework W/E june 27 - 'Annette'

Post by Terry » Thu Jun 06, 2019 3:35 pm

One advantage of getting a bit long in the tooth Shelley; especially if you have knocked about a bit - there's always lots of stories;
as long as the memory holds out.

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Re: Homework W/E june 27 - 'Annette'

Post by Irene » Fri Jun 07, 2019 8:47 pm

Lovely Terry - captures the moments wonderfully and paints a beautiful picture!!
What goes around, comes around.

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