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homework week ending 28/5 Haiku

Posted: Wed May 23, 2018 4:16 pm
by Neville Briggs
I've attempted a Haiku. Harder than you might think.




Two young with rapt gaze
A striped blue and red love seat
A ring reflects light.

Re: homewrok week ending 28/5 Haiku

Posted: Thu May 24, 2018 3:14 pm
by Maureen K Clifford
They are Neville but you have done well - quite a charming picture you have painted with your words - I love Haiku :D

Re: homework week ending 28/5 Haiku

Posted: Thu May 24, 2018 5:25 pm
by Neville Briggs
I noticed on facebook your love of Haiku :lol: :lol: rhyming and stanzas as well ;) :)

Re: homework week ending 28/5 Haiku

Posted: Fri May 25, 2018 8:34 am
by Shelley Hansen
Good one, Neville! I've never attempted Haiku - and I admit the concept confuses me a little, but I appreciate any grouping of words that conjures up a picture for me ... and yours certainly does.

Cheers
Shelley

Re: homework week ending 28/5 Haiku

Posted: Fri May 25, 2018 9:01 am
by Neville Briggs
As I understand it Shelley, the concept is simply three lines, First line 5 syllables, second line 7 syllables and third line 5 syllables. Rhyming or regular metre is optional.
But the main idea I think is to state concrete images not abstract statements. The sense of the emotion or feeling of the moment is intended to come from a description of material objects in the environment. ( I think )

So I think doing Haiku is a worthwhile task for bush poets even if only for practice ,because it requires a hard think about how encountering the world of experience translates into poetic expression. As distinct from merely adding adjectives to try and make a statement about experience. The poet shows the experience with a concrete image. If you know what I mean :lol:

Re: homework week ending 28/5 Haiku

Posted: Mon May 28, 2018 2:47 pm
by Catherine Lee
Well done Neville - haiku is not easy and I agree that you have painted the picture really well here

Re: homework week ending 28/5 Haiku

Posted: Mon May 28, 2018 5:56 pm
by Neville Briggs
Thank you Catherine. :)

Re: homework week ending 28/5 Haiku

Posted: Wed May 30, 2018 10:21 pm
by Shelley Hansen
Mmm ... I will cogitate on this Neville :? ;)

Re: homework week ending 28/5 Haiku

Posted: Wed Jun 06, 2018 4:38 pm
by Terry
Hi Neville
I've only ever written one or two of these - must give it a go again one day.
You have done well with yours,

Terry

Re: homework week ending 28/5 Haiku

Posted: Sat Jun 09, 2018 3:35 pm
by Neville Briggs
Thanks Terry. ;)