INALIENABLE RIGHTS - h'work for w/e 16.4.18

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INALIENABLE RIGHTS - h'work for w/e 16.4.18

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Tue Mar 27, 2018 3:30 pm

INALIENABLE RIGHTS ... Maureen Clifford © The #ScribblyBark Poet

"I'd rather be dead than go back there again
to be bullied and picked on - the place is insane"
and these words that he spoke made his Mother's eyes tear
for he was her first born and to her he was dear.

"I'd rather be dead than give up gun control
it's my right to bear arms - I don't need no foxhole
to allow me to carry the gun of my choice"
And the world's ears all listened - and all heard his voice.

"If you had a teacher ... who was quite adept
at firearms, it could end the attack I suspect
very quickly." But alas teachers did not agree
#Armme with books and not guns was their plea.

"Weapons of destruction they have no place here,
we're teachers of children, not teachers of fear-
being armed to the teeth is not what we require
nor do we want a bonus for returning fire."

And the world watched with horror as this farce went on.
Ancient words writ on parchment was now a theme song.
The kids took up banners and marched in the street
they marched for their lives and to a different beat.

I'd rather die - hyperbole extravagant
most often voiced by a sad worlds inhabitant -
our children are dying ... are we so inept
that we stand and watch whilst the rest of earth wept.
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Post by Wendy Seddon » Wed Mar 28, 2018 9:58 am

GOSH! Hard hitting. Scary.
Well put. Thought provoking.
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Post by Terry » Wed Mar 28, 2018 2:10 pm

We're haunted almost daily aren't we with the latest outrage, and there's no end in sight.

A thoughtful poem that touches all bases, well done Maureen -that one will take a bit of topping.

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Post by Maureen K Clifford » Thu Mar 29, 2018 10:54 am

Thank you Wendy and Terry - I appreciate :D your kind comments
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Post by Catherine Lee » Fri Mar 30, 2018 6:19 pm

So good Maureen - and a tragic farce indeed that makes us wonder what we've come to. Terry is right - we are haunted almost daily and you turn on the News wondering whatever will be next...Anyway, I agree with Wendy and Terry - a thought-provoking write!

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Post by Maureen K Clifford » Sat Mar 31, 2018 1:48 pm

Thank you Catherine - I greatly appreciate your comment :)
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Post by Neville Briggs » Sun Apr 01, 2018 5:43 pm

G'day Maureen. When will we learn that violence is not the solution to violence. If we read the " easter" story in the foundation documents we learn that,
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Post by Maureen K Clifford » Sun Apr 01, 2018 9:36 pm

I suspect the answer to that Neville sadly is Never. Violence just seems to be escalating around the world or maybe it is just getting more publicity and quicker circulation of the fact :(
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