Homework 12/2/2018 'Three Wishes'

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Homework 12/2/2018 'Three Wishes'

Post by Terry » Sun Feb 18, 2018 2:10 pm

A bit late but I’m on holiday at Peaceful bay – hard to concentrate on poetry - Terry


Three Wishes

We sat there by the campfire – three young blokes, and old Jack too,
while talking crazy things, the way that young blokes sometimes do.
Old Jack just sat and listened to the rubbish that we spoke,
a knowing smile upon his lips, then rolled himself a smoke.

The night was warm and balmy with a starry sky above;
the subjects strange and varied and we even spoke of love.
And if you had three wishes granted what would each wish for;
of course it all was nonsense, like the chats we’d had before.

We then asked Jack if granted wishes, just what he would do,
“I’d only need one wish” he said “if such a thing were true.
I’d turn back time to long ago to heal deep wounds that bled,
and try to bring some happiness to mum and dad he said.”

A haunted look then touched his eyes – his face was masked with pain;
long hidden sins resurfaced to torment him once again.
We sat there now in silence each not wanting to intrude,
upon the old blokes memories, nor seeming to seem rude.

We watched old Jack then walk away a tear now in his eye,
an old wound had been opened; Jack was not a man to cry.
The night then closed around us, as I sat there deep in thought;
and realised, what I thought were problems - really count for nought.

© T.E. Piggott

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Re: Homework 12/2/2018 'Three Wishes'

Post by Shelley Hansen » Sun Feb 18, 2018 10:44 pm

Excellent Terry ... and so true. Even the tough guys are often fighting some kind of battle.
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Re: Homework 12/2/2018 'Three Wishes'

Post by Catherine Lee » Wed Feb 21, 2018 1:49 pm

This is beautiful Terry. I bet there are a lot of people out there who feel like this, in varying degrees, and it's so true that in comparison to such feelings, so many problems are as nothing at all.

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Re: Homework 12/2/2018 'Three Wishes'

Post by Terry » Thu Feb 22, 2018 11:00 am

Thanks Shelley & Catherine,

Although not based on anyone in particular, I have ran into blokes hiding from their pasts.
I suppose most of us if we're honest about it, have done things we later regretted.

Cheers Terry

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Re: Homework 12/2/2018 'Three Wishes'

Post by mummsie » Fri Feb 23, 2018 5:54 am

A lovely piece Terry-seamless as ever.
There's something special about a campfire-flames flickering, igniting the deepest of thoughts yet comforting in many ways.
Peaceful Bay-sounds wonderful.
Cheers
Sue
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Re: Homework 12/2/2018 'Three Wishes'

Post by Terry » Sat Feb 24, 2018 8:15 pm

Thanks Sue

Yes Peaceful bay really lives up to it's name - although not today - there's a gale blowing.

There's something special about this place - pity we didn't organize for the pair of you to come down for a few days while you were over this way - I reckon you'd have loved it too.

Regards

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Re: Homework 12/2/2018 'Three Wishes'

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Sat Feb 24, 2018 8:58 pm

Seems your holiday is working its magic Terry - a lovely write with good use made of the prompts. There is always some one worse off than we are in life, something that behoves all of us to remember at times when we are feeling hard done by.
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Re: Homework 12/2/2018 'Three Wishes'

Post by David Campbell » Sun Feb 25, 2018 1:04 pm

A good idea to leave the "deep wounds" to the reader's imagination, Terry. It allows for many different interpretations. Sometimes less is more.

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