Homework W/E October 2: Still Life
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- David Campbell
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Homework W/E October 2: Still Life
Still Life
© David Campbell, 25/09/17
She sets the easel firmly in the past,
the rolling hills a subtle shade of green,
remembering the way she saw it last,
a homestead in a peaceful rural scene
before the demons dressed in darkness came
to tear apart the life she’d always known,
and nothing then could ever be the same
in one locked room where she survives, alone.
But now the palette’s colours are unfurled
to paint what still lives on within her mind,
a vision of that gentler childhood world
and happiness that she has left behind,
a work in progress, one which yet may teach
“forever” is a dream within her reach.
© David Campbell, 25/09/17
She sets the easel firmly in the past,
the rolling hills a subtle shade of green,
remembering the way she saw it last,
a homestead in a peaceful rural scene
before the demons dressed in darkness came
to tear apart the life she’d always known,
and nothing then could ever be the same
in one locked room where she survives, alone.
But now the palette’s colours are unfurled
to paint what still lives on within her mind,
a vision of that gentler childhood world
and happiness that she has left behind,
a work in progress, one which yet may teach
“forever” is a dream within her reach.
- Shelley Hansen
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Re: Homework W/E October 2: Still Life
Beautiful in its simplicity, David! Love it
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Shelley
Cheers
Shelley
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Re: Homework W/E October 2: Still Life
Lovely poem. Makes me want to hug someone and say...Are you OK?
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Re: Homework W/E October 2: Still Life
Thanks, Shelley and Wendy. Sonnets don't get much of a run in bush poetry...we usually write much longer pieces...but it's a valuable exercise having to discipline yourself to say something meaningful in only 14 lines.
Cheers
David
Cheers
David
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Re: Homework W/E October 2: Still Life
Yes indeed, David.
I have loved sonnets since I first discovered them in my early teens - but it took me till I was about 45 years old to write one that I was happy with. They might look simple - and their beauty is in their simplicity - but that same simplicity is very deceptive!
When it came to achieving difficult things with apparent ease, my Mum used to always use the analogy of the acrobatic circus clown - he has to be an expertly trained acrobat before he can create the illusion of making it all look easy and fun.
Cheers
Shelley
I have loved sonnets since I first discovered them in my early teens - but it took me till I was about 45 years old to write one that I was happy with. They might look simple - and their beauty is in their simplicity - but that same simplicity is very deceptive!
When it came to achieving difficult things with apparent ease, my Mum used to always use the analogy of the acrobatic circus clown - he has to be an expertly trained acrobat before he can create the illusion of making it all look easy and fun.
Cheers
Shelley
Shelley Hansen
Lady of Lines
http://www.shelleyhansen.com
"Look fer yer profits in the 'earts o' friends,
fer 'atin' never paid no dividends."
(CJ Dennis "The Mooch o' Life")
Lady of Lines
http://www.shelleyhansen.com
"Look fer yer profits in the 'earts o' friends,
fer 'atin' never paid no dividends."
(CJ Dennis "The Mooch o' Life")
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Re: Homework W/E October 2: Still Life
Sorry for the delay in getting back to you on this David - a poignant sonnet, beautifully crafted with every word punching above its weight. You have totally captured the feeling as well, that I hoped the prompts and the picture would spark. Well done you
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