Razor blades for breakfast again Marty???? Sharp, sharp and quick off the mark.
I just love the way that you wrote this
you are a master of your craft
of poetry writing and rhyming
and this I suspect the first draft.
One could be forgiven if by reading
one assumes rivers are not your forte
for no river man of any repute
would ever loose a raft - ‘twould be naughty.
But it seems you’ve been breasting the bar
and mixing your drinks just a tad
a rum with a fresh Carlton chaser
will raddle your brains Marty lad.
Your continued use of repetition
works somewhat well overall,
but suspect an alcoholic rendition
to music perhaps more would enthral.
Homework week ended some time in April - the River Man
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