Homework week ended 11th November 2013 Tears of a woman

Bob Pacey · Post by **Bob Pacey** » Wed Oct 30, 2013 9:37 am

Well done Marty, I've got writers block so I think you have done well.

Cheers Mate

Bob

Maureen K Clifford · Post by **Maureen K Clifford** » Wed Oct 30, 2013 10:16 am

Beautifully crafted Marty - the only nit pick I would have with it is A blanket crimson red and that only because crimson and red are in effect the same I reckon you could ditch the red - to retain the metre you could perhaps use something like

A blanket crimson now covers all of that tortured ground
or
A blanket shaded crimson appears o'er the tortured ground

Just a thought - but WOW what a magnificent write - well done

Maureen K Clifford · Post by **Maureen K Clifford** » Wed Oct 30, 2013 3:02 pm

Fair 'nough - it's your blankie

I'm a bit partial to o'er myself so we can live and let live I'm sure.

DollyDot · Post by **DollyDot** » Wed Oct 30, 2013 7:59 pm

Nice Marty!
It sure is a good topic to write about maybe because all of us are somehow affected. 'The Cancer of War'.
Thanks

Dot

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