ABPA - Australian Bush Poets Association

Forgotten

©Heather Knight 19.2.2013

No marble, inscription or whimsical lace,
for a child who with love was begotten;
and no one remembers the innocent face
of a child who is sleeping forgotten.

oow. There's a lot between the lines there Heather.

Nice, Heather. Only a few words, but a wealth of ideas.

David

WOW!!! and WOW again. That Miss Heather is a delight IMHO - what an epitaph for a headstone. To my ears that smacks of pure Victoriana. I love it

Cheers

Maureen

Thanks ye all. One of the first poems I posted on the old forum was about a baby's grave and I thought I was sooo clever. The poem, of course is pure crap - but, it has some good ideas and I've gone back and put a few of them here. I've intended to "one day" do a re-write but this homework topic and David's poem spurred me on to actually do something about it. A change of rhyme, a change of metre and "voila". Thanks poets.... I don't think a poem has to be long. Maureen I'm really pleased you think it is a bit Victorian.

Heather

.there's a lot to be said for 'brevity'....unfortunately, I say most of it.... ...so 'brevity' & I are often strangers.
This is really lovely Heather, & I agree with Maureen...much of your work seems to echo Victoriana, which I find delightful. 'Short' can be extremely clever, & this is.

Hey Maureen...if there was a headstone...the child wouldn't be 'forgotten'....(it's that sort of proposed quandary (by me) that does heads in...mine, & I suspect Stephen's...... )

Thanks Glenny. Any sense of Victoriana probably comes from having spent years with my head buried deep in the newspapers of the 1880s - I love the use of 19th century language, the turns of phrase etc and occassionally I am known to use them. And you know, I'm not going to bother re-writing the original poem now because I've said all I want to say in four lines. I've been yearning to use the rhymes of forgotten and begotten for some time now! Mission accomplished!

So much said in so few words. Lovely, Heather.
Robyn

Thanks Robyn.