ABPA - Australian Bush Poets Association

I like it.

But I would prefer without the last two stanzas, I don't think they are needed. I think it has the right "gothic" touch without those. Just my opinion which doesn't need to be noticed.

I like it to Marty - well done.

I also think you could ditch the last verse without taking away from it. To me the last verse reduces its impact and I don't think it is really a humorous poem as such. Like the dog I reckon this one has good bones and also room for expansion should you desire to do so. Try spending 10 minutes and see where it takes you

Thank you for having a shot at it - I was getting worried

Cheers

Maureen

Now I feel guilty. you don't have to do what I suggest.

What do you think of it now Marty ?

Keep playing Marty and having fun - the homework is designed to sharpen the mind not become a chore that has to be done, but I am always happy to see you having a go at the homework because you come up with some pearlers.