Homework 4/2/2013 Childhood Memories

[mummsie]

One of my fondest chilhood memories is the smell of home baked bread.

Childhood Memories

"I wish that I could stop and chat, but I must surely run
for Grandma said "don't tarry boy, the bread is almost done,
go saddle up the old grey mare and set her tail to fly
along the back road-hurry boy-the butter you must buy"

Hot bread with butter, what a treat, and grandma standing there
before the old woodfired stove, her grey and thinning hair.
I wish that she were here today, Oh how the years fly by
the road of life seems empty now, since Grandma said goodbye.


Mummsie

[Bob Pacey]

Who is that strange woman ??? Good to see you back on site Sue must be getting quieter at the park ?


And very well written as well

Cheers Bob

[Maureen K Clifford]

Beautiful Sue - left me wanting to read more about Grandma I felt it was an unfinished story

Good on you for having a go at the challenge and conquering it. Have you started up a Poets corner at the Caravan Park yet

Cheers

Maureen

[mummsie]

Hello Bob & Maureen
Thank you for your comments-yes Maureen, it's a story that could go on and on, once the idea gets in your head it tends to run away!!!!
Park has quietened Bob, starting to feel like there is a life outside. This weekend is fully booked, after that hopefully I can get back to some poetry.
Having a week off after Easter for the Man From Snowy River Fetival-can't wait!! Had a couple of poet sessions with John Peel & Jim Lamb and a flying visit from Terry on his way to Tamworth. Jackimay has paid a visit along with Laurie McDonald.

Back to the poem.I tried to set this up with the first verse in italics, but somehow I couldn't get it to work-help!!!please, I've been off the site so long I've forgotten how things work.
Cheers to all
Sue

[Leonie]

Hi Sue, this is lovely - and beautifully written. The bones of a really top notch poem. Stick a handful of verses in between these two about the trip to town (and back) to pick up the butter and you've got a comp winner I reckon.

Can't help with the italics - sorry.

[Leonie]

About the italics have you tried highlighting the first verse on here (probably need to go to edit) and then hitting the italic key, might work.

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Yep, that should work, I just tried it with the above post.

[mummsie]

Thanks for that Leonie- simple when someone points it out to you . And thanks for taking the time to read and comment.

Sue

[Neville Briggs]

I'm glad something has quietened Bob.


I like that Sue. Good work. In my annoying opinion it is complete. It is a poem not a novel, I think it says all you need to say. The purpose of the exercise in my understanding is to practice getting lots of meaning into a small statement. That's what poetry does I think. And you did it I reckon.

[mummsie]

Thanks Neville
Hope all is well with you.

Cheers
Sue

[Heather]

I'm with Neville, Sue. It tells me a story as it is. It has the sound of a nursery rhyme to me in the first stanza - jaunty and easy to learn probably.

Heather