Homework week ending 24/12 Thirteen steps down

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Re: Homework week ending 24/12 Thirteen steps down

Post by Neville Briggs » Wed Dec 12, 2012 4:35 pm

That looks good Marty. I preferred it when the metre was a bit " uneven " ( if that's what is was ?) but you won't want to change it again.

I think the phrase with weighed in 10th line is a good choice. You wouldn't take my suggestion but when a female says it you take notice...I'll remember that..mate ! :lol:

I think you are right that the hangman was despised by a lot of the community. I've seen what some of the ruthless killers have done, why anyone would have animosity towards the hangman for despatching them is beyond me. I heard that one of the jobs allocated to the hangman in old England , was to deal with unruly hoons in the community by literally kicking them out of town. Sounds good to me.
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Re: Homework week ending 24/12 Thirteen steps down

Post by Heather » Wed Dec 12, 2012 4:45 pm

Sounds like you have your sights on a new vocation Neville! :lol:

Neville I think it was more that I agreed with you, therefore adding weight to your argument - against which Marty was powerless to resist. Anyhow, "weighed" was on of your suggestions whereas I'd have gone for something like "paid"..... ;)

Heather :D

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Re: Homework week ending 24/12 Thirteen steps down

Post by Bob Pacey » Wed Dec 12, 2012 4:52 pm

Very vivid pictures Marty, I found myself thinking of him making his way to the gallows and back, Just a job that needed to be done.

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