That looks good Marty. I preferred it when the metre was a bit " uneven " ( if that's what is was ?) but you won't want to change it again.
I think the phrase with weighed in 10th line is a good choice. You wouldn't take my suggestion but when a female says it you take notice...I'll remember that..mate !
I think you are right that the hangman was despised by a lot of the community. I've seen what some of the ruthless killers have done, why anyone would have animosity towards the hangman for despatching them is beyond me. I heard that one of the jobs allocated to the hangman in old England , was to deal with unruly hoons in the community by literally kicking them out of town. Sounds good to me.
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Sounds like you have your sights on a new vocation Neville!
Neville I think it was more that I agreed with you, therefore adding weight to your argument - against which Marty was powerless to resist. Anyhow, "weighed" was on of your suggestions whereas I'd have gone for something like "paid".....
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Neville I think it was more that I agreed with you, therefore adding weight to your argument - against which Marty was powerless to resist. Anyhow, "weighed" was on of your suggestions whereas I'd have gone for something like "paid".....
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Very vivid pictures Marty, I found myself thinking of him making his way to the gallows and back, Just a job that needed to be done.
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After you grasp that everything else seems insignificant !!!
After you grasp that everything else seems insignificant !!!