HOMEWORK CHALLENGE FOR WEEK ENDING 08/10/12

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HOMEWORK CHALLENGE FOR WEEK ENDING 08/10/12

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Mon Sep 24, 2012 12:55 am

Who is up for a real challenge? Let’s see how good you mob really are.

Do you reckon you can compete and beat the modern day rapper – who like them or love them are pretty good at using multi syllabic rhymes.

In rapping and poetry, multisyllabic rhymes (also known as compound rhymes, polysyllable rhymes, and sometimes colloquially in hip-hop as multies) are rhymes that contain two or more syllables as in -

eg. Touch her not scornfully, think of her mournfully.
Pair of dice - Paradise
the axolotl fish - the bottle and the dish


Manfred has given me an example used with permission of a very clever use of multi syllabic rhyming. It is one of Graham’s poems


Check this out ...............

PATERSON’S YELLOW BAY
(c) Graham Fredriksen, 1956 - 2010

I’ll tell you a tale from the gone days of glory when
..... Australia’s Lighthorse was a fearsome machine;
rough-riders, rough horses—the stars of this story—when
..... I was in Egypt in nineteen sixteen.
Ah! Nineteen sixteen, back in old Heliopolis…
..... Pyramids, ruins and temples of yore,
from the times when the town was a Roman metropolis—
..... what battles those columns and cobblestones saw !

But sackings by Saladin, sieges Napoleon,
scarce held a match to the wars that went down
when we came along with our horses unholy, and
..... formed a Remount Unit depot in town.
Army Remounts: it was our job distributing
..... fresh horses to regiments spread far and wide;
but at times we were saddled with rogues and this tribute in
..... part is to outlaws no one else would ride:

The scourings of all of the equine Australia,
..... steeds for whom Lucifer served as a sire,
were re-handled till troops in full paraphernalia
..... could climb aboard safely and ride under fire.
We bagged them, we lunged them, we rode them down wadis till
..... we tempered their temperament—hock deep in sand;
we long-reined, we short-reined, we pet them like poddies till
..... even the worst of them ate from our hand.

... and on for another twelve stanzas ...

take a look not only at the multi-syllabic end rhymes and their creation, but also pay careful attention to the meticulous metre ...



Up for the challenge??? Of course you are. :lol: :lol: OK go for it. Show us what you’re made of.

Cheers

Maureen
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